"where am I now?" asked Gary.
He had just spent 6 years searching for a pony of his own. He had finally given up and decided to go to the next town. He decided to walk towards Ponyville.
"I wonder what this town is?" he asked himself.
"OH! I KNOW!" screamed Pinkie Pie. "THIS IS PONYVILLE!"
"Did you just say Ponyville?" asked Blue.
"YES I DID!" she screamed, "WE JUST HAD A PARTY FOR MY FRIEND TWILIGHT!"
"Twilight?" asked Green.
"YES!" said Pinky, "She just left with a Red guy. He was Really nice, said they were going to Mt. Lake Rage in Kalos."
"So this is Ponyville?" he asked.
"Yes."
"And Twilight was here?"
"Yes."
"And she was taken by a Red guy?"
"Yes."
"Can you show me where?" asked Blue.
"Okie Dokie Lokie." she replied.
She then took him off to the place where they just had the going away party.
"So this is where the party was?" he asked.
"Yes it was." she replied.
"Hey Pinkie," said Applejack, "Where do you want these left over streamers?"
"Over there." said Pinkie.
"I need to catch that pony." said Gary as he got out a Pokeball.
"GO! FENNEKIN!" he screamed.
"FENNEKIN!" it replied.
"FENNEKIN! USE EMBER ON THE ORANGE ONE!" Green screamed.
Fennekin then used ember on the unsespecting Applejack.
"AAGGGGGGHHHHHHHABCDEFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYZJHWHHFDHFHSFHSFHFJFSJHSFVBUJWUF!" she screamed.
"GO! POKEBALL!" screamed Blue as he threw the Pokeball.
Applejack got sucked inside it. The pokeball shook 1, 2, and then 3 times, then 4, 5, six, 7th, eighth, ninerd, 10st, 11, 12, 13th, 14rd, 15st, 16nd, 17, 18, 19, 20, 21rd, 22st, 23nd, 24, 25, 26st, 27th, twenty 8, 29, thirty, 31th, 32nd, thirty-third, 34, 35st, and then a 36th time. Then it clicked.
"Ok," said Gary, "I got aa pony, just wait until red sees me now."
"You can have her." said Rarity.
"Yeah," said Rainbow Dash, "She was pony that no fly and no get around good as me."
"I like it with only 4 of us here." said Fluttershy, "It will be more quiet."
"She never did anything anyways." said Pinky, "I am glad you are taking her."
"Ok then." said Gary as he called Back Fennekin, "Fennekin, return."
He then went towards the door with an exit sign above it.
"SMELL YA LATER!" he screamed as he walked through the door.
There is no such word as "catched". The past tense of the word catch is "caught". This is the second title you've used that has made that mistake.
Again, the word is 'caught'. You are a bad person and should feel bad.
4086363 Thank you, I get that a lot.
4086305 What mistake?
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So either you're a moron or you're trolling in which case I don't have time to waste with you.
On the off chance that you're sincere. Read carefully what I wrote. Everything you need to know is there.
4086531 As I have read before, Mark Twain used the word 'catched' in his stories, I am just using a word that a great writer has used.
This story has a lot of dislikes, most likely resulting from the word "catched" used in the title, as well as other grammatical errors. I don't know you, but I know you're capable of much, much more than this. And, rather than pushing others away and ignoring them when they give you corrections, embrace them, and take their words into consideration. Though you may see them as mere "haters" that should just be ignored, keep in mind that "haters" are an important key to improvement.
4086363 I don't think that anyone has any right to say that they're a "bad person." Maybe what they did was bad, but just not the person. Also, when it comes to writing, you can't lash out at the writer just because you didn't like their story.
4086548 Thank you
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Actually, it's the fact that these stories are basically trolling that has me riled.
4086560 Hey! I actually try on these stories. I hate to say it, but I put more work into these than my other stories. And I know people that do like them, so those people are the ones that are the great people who see my story for what it is. I have no idea what it is, but still, I try in these stories.
4086560 Maybe he/she isn't trolling. What if this person actually worked hard on this? And now people are calling it a troll? Don't be a like that. It's true that he might have disregarded some much-needed advice, but there's no need to be like that. To say that the story is just a troll after the author might have worked very hard on this is just disrespectful and flat-out wrong
4086560 I'm usually fine with haters, but this is ridiculous. You should know that in this type of fandom, to call someone's work a troll is horrible, as they might have worked endlessly on it. I like you, and you're a good person
So don't be a jerk, 'cuz I know you're not
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Bro, even the fucking title has terrible grammar. Catched? Also, putting less than a thousand words into a chapter is NOT working hard, regardless of what you've led yourself to believe.
In fact, the only thing hard about this story was reading it, because it felt like my eyes were burning with each new word. You should not try writing on this site unless you have a good grasp on the English language. So either this guy has little to no grasp on it or he's a troll.
Anyways, I'd be willing to help out a bit if the author wants it, but otherwise, good day.
4086682 But I do work hard. I say anyone that has to come up with a story is working, and it doesn't matter how you define working, I did work hard on this.
4086682 Just leave him alone, dude. Seriously, that's real mature
Everyone has their downfall, so don't push him lower. Your not helping. I'm sorry to be short, but I'm really fed up with comments like that in the fandom. You're a good person; I like you, and I respect you and your opinions. Just don't mess it up
4086881 No, I'm fed up with people like YOU in this god damn fandom. All you do is defend bad writers without giving them any tips, so you basically make them think they're actually good at writing when in reality they need to fucking work on their grammar, spelling, etc.
And then I'M the one being immature? Buddy, I offered to help him out by devoting my time to helping him become a better writer. It's not MY fault he didn't take that offer. It's not MY fault he thinks he's working hard when he's not. Hard work results in good writing. Hard work means taking the time to proofread and edit your shit before you post it. Hard work means being able to sacrifice your time to make your story the best it can be.
This guy has done none of that, and there's nobody to blame but himself.
4086895 I'm sorry, please forgive me. I didn't mean to upset you. I really shouldn't have gotten involved in this
I really didn't say I was fed up with people like you in the fandom. I'm glad you're here, and I wouldn't have it any other way
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Oh the irony, comparing yourself to Mark Twain, one of the greatest satirists of his age. Fact is he could get away with such a thing. You can't. If you're going to write in contemporary English then stick to it.
4086895 I'm going to say something here. If someone wanted to make a cake, but had no idea how to, then that means they didn't try hard to make it? They didn't work hard to make a cake that looks and tastes like crap? I have to say it is opinion based if you think a story is good or not, but you have no right to say they didn't work hard on it. How do you know a person didn't work hard on it?
Once again, read through the comments for a magical adventure!
But really. I get you worked hard on this, but the grammer, as said many times, does need improvement. Claiming that you should use the word "catched" in the title in this for of sentence because Twain used it isn't a valid reason. "Caught" is in proper english.
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That just proves my point. If you don't know how to make a cake, what the fuck are you doing trying to make one? Fucking read the instructions, mate.
Just like you. Learn to edit. Don't come up with these shitty metaphors to defend yourself. You didn't work hard. If you worked hard, your story wouldn't be written so terribly. I redirect you to this:
You did none of that. Good fucking day, sir.
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First I'd recommend learning how to spell 'caught'. It's pretty easy, actually. C-A-U-G-H-T
I never have and never will try your other stories.
4087132 I completely agree with you.
4087201 My other stories are good, and there are people that like them. I need to update them soon though, haven't in a long time.
4086895
I like you. We can be friends!
4090125 The bestest!
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Can we all be friends? I like friends. Friendship is Magic.