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Updated. Be arbitrarily happy now.

Lamias, Hypnosis, Transformation/Metamorphosis, Tentacles, Light (Non-Fatal) Vore. And what is quickly becoming a trademark for me, Lactation, because I just cannot help myself.

Vore

Lamias

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wat

Okay... right, gonna have to down vote and stop reading this... seriously the amount of plot holes and pacing issues in this are far too plentiful to be contained as we all know Twilight wouldn't be stupid enough to let ANYONE be alone with Dash when SHE JUST FINISHED FUCKING EXPLAINING THAT FLUTTERSHY WAS ABLE TO HYPNOTIZE PEOPLE AND TURNED HER INTO THE SAME CREATURE SHE WAS!

I honestly can't enjoy a story that only can accomplish it's goals by making characters clutch the idiot ball to the point that it's a deus ex machina.

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I understand what you're saying here - and I don't like idiot balls or deus ex machinas either. But I suppose this falls under "Authorial Intent." The intent being that while Rainbow Dash did just explain all that, she was still behaving like Rainbow Dash. She seemed to still be herself. Whereas Fluttershy was certainly not behaving like herself, so that's why Twilight didn't exercise as much caution with Rainbow Dash as she did with Fluttershy, because she figured Dash's mind was still normal while Fluttershy's wasn't based on their behaviors.

But still ... failed execution is failed execution. I'll try to do better next time. I hate idiot balls too.

4895344 Mate, I'm gonna be frank but, the fact that they only saw Fluttershy normal last night and she's ALREADY ACTING like that would let Twilight know not to trust Rainbow for any length of time and if someone DOESN'T STOP RAINBOW FROM EATING AND CONVERTING PINKIE PREFERABLY VIOLENTLY then there isn't any hope for this story as the deus ex machina would have tainted your story beyond salvation.

Authorial intent loses all validation when you say you don't want to use the idiot ball yet you give EVERYONE one to hold.

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Well, I certainly didn't intend to use a Ball for everyone, did I?

4895444 It does feel like it sadly. I mean everyone who wasn't a Lamia didn't even think about that?

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"Everyone who wasn't a Lamia" figured "Dash is tired, she needs rest. She won't get into trouble because she's too busy napping." And she was doing her best to cooperate when Fluttershy wasn't, so they didn't have much reason to doubt her.

And they do stop her from eating Pinkie next chapter, if that makes you feel any better.

4895566 Fine, I might as well see what happens next. Though if Twilight continues to clutch the idiot ball at this point then there isn't any hope for this story.

That lactation part was so hawt.

before i even atempt to read this story i just have to ask by "light(non-fatle) vore what do you mean that just confuses me is it the reguler you get eatin vore(whitch i highly doubt is non fatle) anal vore,or vaginal vore aka"unbirthing" bolth of wich kinda almost seem always fatle please elaborate beacuse the subject of vore can highly confuse and unsettle me again please explane when u can thank you
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“Yeah, I can smell you.” Dash waved her hands in front of her nose. “Actually, I can smell all of you. Could you, like, stand a little further apart? Your smells are all mixing together with each other, and it's really disorienting ...”

Heh...heh... OMG 0:33

“Great!” Twilight clapped. She nudged her head at Dash. “It, uh, doesn't have scented candles or anything, does it?”
“I can take them out.” Rarity said, quickly going to the stairs.

LOL

“Okay, girls. When Rarity gets back, we're going to draw up plans. Pinkie Pie, you take Rainbow Dash upstairs. Make sure she actually rests instead of flying or something, then come back down here.”

Oh I think she's gonna turn into a snake next.

Rarity dumped her scent decorations on the kitchen counter. “Oh my! It's nearly time to pick Sweetie Belle up from school!”

That was too fast for that much time to go by!

“Duh, of course I smell like sweets! I mean, I spend so much time baking, why wouldn't I smell like sweets? Hey, what do people say you smell like, Rainbow Dash?” Pinkie turned to face Rainbow Dash, and her mind started to drain and slow. “Oh, pretty colors! … Rainbow … Dash, I … never realized your eyes were … so pretty ...”

Knew it!!!

Rarity got to the school just after the bell had rang, so she had to wade through a sea of leaving children to find her sister.
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This was the best I could find but I think you get my point.

I was a bit hesitant to include lactation as first, as I dealt with THAT particular kink plenty in my "Poison" series. But try as I might, I just couldn't find Lactating Lamias, despite the obvious alliterative appeal.

My favorite fetish is milk so I was happy to see that. Got a link to that poison series?