NetherFlash And Whitefeather: The Series

by RainbowKnight

From Bad To Worse

Ponyville: the friendliest of all towns. Birds chirp in their trees and ponies go on their daily business, unaware of what lies beyond their small town. Though it isn’t very technologically advance, it still has a fresh and modern feel to it. Nothing bad could possibly go wrong. Nothing...right?
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“Ok everypony, get into your positions. Clear the road. Derpy, would you stop throwing muffins onto the streets?!" Twilight Sparkle was barking orders at everypony. "Everything needs to be perfect, people!” Twilight ordered, searching for anything that could be improved.

It had been a long time since anypony had visited Ponyville; so when Twilight heard that four new ponies were moving into Ponyville, she immediately took action. Mayor Mare was gracious to give command of the citizens in their small town to Twilight; she was a princess, after all. For the entire day, the citizens had been setting up the decorations and banners that had been donated by their own party pony, Pinkie Pie. “Welcome the Ponyville” had been labeled on the banners, and numerous balloons lay scattered around with the same message encrypted on them. While most people may think this is a little too much for just four average ponies, Twilight was determined to make this great. It was rare, after all, that FOUR ponies would move to Ponyville.

Finally, everypony was in position, they were all crowded together in a circle. Twilight noticed the sun in the middle of the sky. 'Good, they were supposed to come into town at midday. That means they should be here any minute.' she thought smugly.

No one came walking into town for the next ten minutes. Soon, those ten minutes became twenty minutes, then thirty. Ponies started to complain, and even Twilight began to doubt they were coming. A few ponies had begun to walk away from the group, finally Twilight gave up entirely.
"I guess they changed their minds, everypony..." Twilight sighed, only to be cut off.

At that moment, the blare of a car horn pierced through the silence. Everypony looked around, before realizing the noise was coming from the sky. A few ponies let out screams and ducked as a SUV fell through the clouds, heading directly towards the ground. It landed with a great thud, followed by smoke coming from the hood.

Once again, silence invaded the town. The doors to the car opened with a great force, followed by what sounded like cheers. The first pony to exit the car was a tall, green, earth pony stallion with a sad-face cutie mark. On further inspection, he was also bald. He examined his surroundings with a casual smirk. The stallion's smirk grew wider and sicker as he spotted something, and he began to walk towards a group of fillies. The second one to exit was a red, Pegasi stallion with black stripes in his red mane, he had a knife cutie mark. Noticing the green stallion, he ran over to it, and kicked it in the back of the head. The last pony was a black Pegasi stallion with red stripes in his black mane, he had a bloody knife cutie mark. He looked almost exactly like the red one, except that his eyes were bloodshot.

Twilight cleared her throat and walked forward.

“Greetings. My name is Princess Twilight Sparkle. Welcome to Ponyville, I’m sure we would all like to meet all of you." Before she finished, something appeared abruptly beside the red Pegasi with black stripes. Under inspection, Twilight realized it was small, white, alicorn filly who was adorned with a black scarf. She also appeared to not have a cutie mark (one of the first things that the Cutie Mark Crusaders noticed upon her exiting the van). Trying to shrug off their fact that there was no sign that magic had been used, Twilight forced a smile. "First of all, what are your names?” Twilight greeted the new arrivals in a casual tone, trying not to seem too curious.

The red stallion opened his mouth to speak, but he was interrupted by the white alicorn saying in a soft innocent voice.

“Um, hi. I'm Whitefeather. Have you seen Daddy? He's hard to miss. He has no face, and I lost him again. I'm here with my friend NetherFlash, at least." Whitefeather said softly, pointing at the red stallion who was apparently “NetherFlash”.

“Oh…well, is there anything else I need to know?” Twilight asked half-heartedly, wavered by the fact she claimed her father had no face. It was only then that she noticed the filly had suddenly teleported to a few feet away. The small filly seemed startled herself, and this made Twilight even more curious.

“Oh, NetherFlash is a Hell Pony." The white alicorn added, blinking up at Twilight. "Oh, and people call Daddy Slender Mane."

“Whitefeather, shut up before you get us in trouble…” NetherFlash whispered through clenched teeth. As if proving his point, he shot the filly a sharp glare. His red eyes met innocent grey ones as she turned back to Twilight.

“NetherFlash is the coolest pony around." At this statement, Rainbow Dash let out a snort, frowning. "He lets me play lots of cool games like Grand Theft Auto and Assassin’s Creed. But...Daddy would hurt him real bad if he knew. He says video games are the work of the devil. Hee hee, but he's closer related to Grandpa than NetherFlash but...anyway, Daddy makes me read boring books like calculus and economic strategies." White Feather’s voice grew progressively softer as she noticed the other ponies.

“Oh really…err. Could you speak a bit louder?” Twilight asked, straining her ears to hear the tiny filly.

“Oh, I'm so, so, so sorry." Whitefeather whispered, not meeting Twilights gaze. "Anyways, there is also NetherBlaze, who is Netherflash’s alter ego. He’s the black pony (not sounding racist).” Whitefeather said, her gaze flickering over to the said Pegasi. Twilight laughed at the filly's statement.

“Silly filly, you do realize that alter egos can’t have different bodies than the pony it is an alter ego of, right?” She said, glancing down at the alicorn.

“Well, this alter ego does. He was supposed to be really evil and destroy all life. But before that could happen, he ate some weird candy and he's really funny. He shares with me sometimes, but I never remember it. Now he’s harmless…most of the time.” Whitefeather said, looking up at the larger alicorn.

“Oh.” Twilight said, furrowing her brows. Her eyes found NetherBlaze. He was stumbling along like a drunk man, yelling about penguins... Finally, he collapsed.

“Err. Hey Whitefeather, why don’t you go and make some friends?” NetherFlash asked her, trying to get her to hush up. Whitefeather looked up at him. Soon, she nodded, and trotted off towards three fillies. An orange Pegasi with purple hair, a white unicorn with pink/purple hair and a yellowish earth filly with red hair. NetherFlash chuckled at her, rolling his eyes slightly. Everyone had already gone, only having the fillies, Twilight, and the newcomers. Twilight looked down at the green stallion who was still unconscious.

“So…what’s his name?” She asked in a cautious voice. NetherFlash looked down at the green stallion before beginning.

“Oh, his name? He's Marcus Oddity, but we call him Mr. Oddity. I would be very alert on where he is, if I were you.” NetherFlash answered evenly, stifling a yawn.

“Why?” Twilight asked, a spark of curiosity flaring up in her.

"Well, he’s kind of a…well… a…he is very interested in foals." NetherFlash replied in a calm fashion "Especially Whitefeather....” He added, almost as if an afterthought.

Twilight nodded in understanding. She closed her eyes, in thought. Suddenly, a burning hatred coursed through her veins and her eyes snapped open.

“So wait…you’ve come to tell me that you and your group are made up of two hell ponies, a pedophile, and a filly who claims to be the child of Slender Mane?!” She cried out incredulously at NetherFlash.

“Hmm…pretty much." NetherFlash answered calmly. He was used to this. "Though, I’ll make sure to get rid of Mr. Oddity at the first chance I get.” He added.

Heat flared through Twilight’s veins.

“You know what ‘NetherFlash’. I know I can’t banish you and your little group without a cause. But the second I get a chance. You and your group of misfits are going to be gone! G-O-N-E, gone!” Twilight spat out. She nearly jumped as there was a soft sound of static, followed by the tiny filly popping up next to her.

“Geez, you need to chill out. Huh, see you later!” NetherFlash said, glancing at Whitefeather who was darting back to the other fillies. With a shrug, he began to walk away, dragging Mr. Oddity with him. A sinister hatred burned through Twilight.

“I’ll get you. Ha! I’ll get you all!”

Comments

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I remeber you from the panel and I would like to give you a few pointers. If any of this makes you feel insulted...then take it to heart more and do better.
Try to stay away from real world references like the games you mentioned, It can take the reader out of the story really fast.
Its all conversations and not much descriptions (I do that a lot myself) its important to give your character motions while they are talking but its their action that will bring a character to life.
Just add more descriptive writing over all and the rest of your writing skill with fall in place.
I am interested were a group of misfits like this can make it work.

Dont ever stop writing.