When Pinkie Pie learns about a mythical "Perfect Cupcake", she sets out on a journey searching for the recipe to find one. Little does she know that the ingredients might not be as simple as she thought.
..........a tragedy with a crazy alicorn from nowhere tricking pinkie into molesting her friends?.............. well if they don't forgve her for doing that i can definitely see.
...............also, pinkie is not quite THAT naive. i mean, how many villians have she seen so far?
admitably, it is farily well written.............. you need to seperate the sentences though. When the charactersspeak you shoudl divide them into seperate lines, not kept in the same paragraph.
3702291 i.................umm did you mean that reply for me? you need to click the arrow at the top right of a comment. looks like a fast forward button. then some numbers appear in the comment box and it links to the comment.
..........a tragedy with a crazy alicorn from nowhere tricking pinkie into molesting her friends?.............. well if they don't forgve her for doing that i can definitely see.
...............also, pinkie is not quite THAT naive. i mean, how many villians have she seen so far?
admitably, it is farily well written.............. you need to seperate the sentences though. When the charactersspeak you shoudl divide them into seperate lines, not kept in the same paragraph.
I knew it was missing something.
Thanks for your help!
3702291 i.................umm did you mean that reply for me?
you need to click the arrow at the top right of a comment. looks like a fast forward button. then some numbers appear in the comment box and it links to the comment.
3703599 ok thank you. I'm fairly new to this site. Sorry for the confusion.