“Heh, yeah. Well, part of the reason for pairing up is kind’a shallow, but the other half is cool. I thought if I got a little stretch from that thing first, I’d be able to help Fluttershy out.” She looked over to those two, nearly forgetting they weren’t alone. Judging by the intensity of Rainbow and Shy’s love making, they probably didn’t even notice the gryphon lift a pony larger than herself and walk across the room with her. On the plus side, maybe she wouldn’t even need to attempt to take that beast, Dash making it down to just before that thick thing’s hilt.

She shook her head, forgetting she’d been in the middle of an explanation. “Anyhow, the other reason I chose you was…” Gilda sighed, lifting herself up to get a decent look at her cum coated partner. “You know, the way I treated you last time. I mean yeah, I yelled at Shy, but you were making all this effort to show me a good time and I spat in your face trying to hog Dash’s attention.”

You have this/these paragraphs twice in a row.

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Aaahhhh, I knew I'd mess up in that specific way somewhere. I copy and paste bits and pieces of the dropbox file over to fimfiction before I submit it as opposed to just ctrl + a and ctrl + v'ing the whole thing. I don't know what I was thinking, I usually use that as an opportunity to thoroughly preread the story before submitting, but in this instance, I was going way too fast and it ended up making typos for me >_>

I'm gonna reread the whole thing now and try to keep an eye out for any more of those as well as sections that are too repetitive with wording. Thank you very much for pointing those out to me~

That was a fun chapter. Good work, man.

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Thanks! I was kinda worried people would think it got a bit repetitive (particularly how Pinkie ate Gilda out twice) but after giving it a ‘thorough’ reread and fixing some typos, it seemed to hold up alright.

I wish I had thought to rewrite the story sooner, I’ve had pretty much only positive responses to it, yours included :3

Is still waiting for this masterpiece to continue its trek to the climax

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While I'm not quite getting the last chapter out as fast as I would have hoped, I am happy to report I'm at 8'200+ words as I write this. I'm thinking it'll be around 12'000 by the end, as I'd just started the final scene which will involve the sex stuff eluded to in the third chapter hehe.

I appreciate the interest, man (as well as the follow and fav'ing of my other stories lol) There are plans for a bonus chapter after the next upload, but for all intents and purposes, I will mark it complete and move onto other stories, as all the heartfelt stuff and the story of her 'redemption' are complete.