Long ago, Luna's army was comprized of some of the most powerful unicorns and the only species of bat pegasi. To this day, only one natural bat pony lives.
the fourth wall is officually shattered in the most blunt way possible. ‘What’s the writer thinking here? Does he just want another fight scene?’ she thought to herself.
i'm speechless but i will attempt speech anyways, good job on everything but this, i mean when other stories break the fourth wall at least they try to use a character which it would seem believeable with but then almost never use the main character for it as it is increadibly hard to pull off and you sir have not pulled it off, now i understand this may be for comidic relief but it just doesn't work like this.
sorry to be blunt and step on toes but this is one of my peeves, unless this is your writing style or the characters are ACTIVELY AWARE OF THE WRITER this does not work, and if they are they should be having an existential crisis right now sorry
8797161 Honestly it's been so long I can't fully remember if she was. I think she was the only one that was actually aware of the 4th wall. Hell I think she broke it WAY early in the story at the beginning.
the fourth wall is officually shattered in the most blunt way possible.
‘What’s the writer thinking here? Does he just want another fight scene?’ she thought to herself.
i'm speechless but i will attempt speech anyways,
good job on everything but this, i mean when other stories break the fourth wall at least they try to use a character which it would seem believeable with but then almost never use the main character for it as it is increadibly hard to pull off and you sir have not pulled it off,
now i understand this may be for comidic relief but it just doesn't work like this.
sorry to be blunt and step on toes but this is one of my peeves,
unless this is your writing style or the characters are ACTIVELY AWARE OF THE WRITER this does not work, and if they are they should be having an existential crisis right now
sorry
8797161
Honestly it's been so long I can't fully remember if she was. I think she was the only one that was actually aware of the 4th wall. Hell I think she broke it WAY early in the story at the beginning.