Let's see
"and smash into the ground with a powerful smash" change the sentence, please. It just sounds silly.
Too many "she's". Illiteral.
Some misspelling.
I am not sure, but Gilda is kinda out of Character here. Too... kind? Stalin recommend you to add her a little more jerkness.
Moderate amount of descriptions, Stalin enjoys.
OVERALL:
You need a proofreader/editor. Story is worth for attention if not all these illiteracy and spelling mistakes. Keep work after you'll find a proofreader. Stalin will look forward to read your story.

Stalin commands to dance!

305164 well i have a friend that's a but busy at the moment so i can't ask her so maybe you'd want to help? i'd give credit and such.
what do ya say?

Nice little story, needs some editing but still good.
305164
Characters change, and Gilda most likely changed after getting dumped by Dash.
Good day.

305558 Not all characters change, my tovyarich capitalist. Gilda did not, i am sure. She leave Dash because Dash was "uncool" and have no regret of her actions or any lesson she have learnt.
305553 Horosho, Stalin will help you. Stalin will contact you by pm when his scientists will finish grammar check

305576 yeah gilda is one of those people, the kind that are tough but act differantly around there friends.

305579 okay doke. i'll start working on the third chapter now. also i'm just guessing here but i'm guessing in most of your talks you say stalin.

305585
All right, but dont hold your expectations too high. I can fix only obvious grammar, but for more you need a real proofreader

Also you can find proofreader in only group when i currently am. Autor's help to be exact

305589 don't worry my friend. i'm sure what ever you do will be good. i mean you can only try your best. so good luck

305579
'my tovyarich capitalist' ?
I not, but I'm not yours ethier.
And just leaving her?
She lost her best friend, I think she will of probaly realised what has gone wrong.
Good day.