Looks like you rewrote a lot of this. Nicely done.
It wasn't long ago i sent that message, which makes me wonder if you fixed everything on your own or whether you rewrote this and fixed the bits i pointed out that were still here. Either way, this is much better than the original version.
i'm not usually one to read pinkamena-related gorefics (or similar), but rarity always gets me. and with the description and everything i hope that maybe she survives, but in any case that we get some feely shit. so with that said...MOAR! i anxiously await following chapters.
Looks like you rewrote a lot of this. Nicely done.
It wasn't long ago i sent that message, which makes me wonder if you fixed everything on your own or whether you rewrote this and fixed the bits i pointed out that were still here.
Either way, this is much better than the original version.
Note to self - check messages BEFORE commenting, that way you won't look like an idiot.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
Awaiting next Chapter![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
Was expecting more to happen, but I can't wait for the next chapter!
i'm not usually one to read pinkamena-related gorefics (or similar), but rarity always gets me. and with the description and everything i hope that maybe she survives, but in any case that we get some feely shit.
so with that said...MOAR! i anxiously await following chapters.