All is at peace. The newly crowned Twilight has brought an unheard of tranquility among the 12 kingdoms of this world, But this never last for long and trouble is brewing. And it all starts with a human falling from the sky.
The story is good so far but sometimes you don't write in the correct tense. If you don't have a editor or proof reader I suggest getting one. The story is turning out to be good so far and I did enjoy the talk with pinkie.
3457098well thank you for the complement and sorry about the tense i am working on it because i don't what a proof reader because i want to see want i can do by myself. and i wasn't planning to get this done until this weekend and when i finished i was so excited that i didn't read over it again looking for all my mistakes and after reading it again i found quite a few and will be re-uploading tomorrow.
The story is good so far but sometimes you don't write in the correct tense. If you don't have a editor or proof reader I suggest getting one. The story is turning out to be good so far and I did enjoy the talk with pinkie.
3457098well thank you for the complement and sorry about the tense i am working on it because i don't what a proof reader because i want to see want i can do by myself. and i wasn't planning to get this done until this weekend and when i finished i was so excited that i didn't read over it again looking for all my mistakes and after reading it again i found quite a few and will be re-uploading tomorrow.
3458048 Thats good. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Now thats what i call a good story Keep up good work with 4th wall... oh and story too