Simon and Lewis test out a new portal experiment in YogLabs that takes them somewhere that they didn't quite didn't mean to go to, and have no way back. Hilarity ensues.
Hm....decent chapter...caught a couple errors here and there. I shall point some out. "Unmeaningly ran into a pony" Do you mean something like "Unintentionally"? Unmeaningly doesn't sound right to me... -"Pinkie popped her head up from behind the counter, saying, "Hey! You're not a Poniet!"- Unneeded quotation mark at the beginning, and what in Luna is a Poniet? Last error that I will correct: "And their Magic!" Wrong spelling of They're, and magic shouldn't be capitalized... Otherwise, I'm liking this story. (I'm just a major nazi for everything spelling,grammar, and punctuation)
2990934 I usually never read the comments :3 And I think I overlooked that "Poniet" thing in earlier chapters, if what I've seen in the comments(that I decided to read) pointing that out.
I don't get on the site for like, three days, and then when I get back you've made like 5 chapters! I'm not sure what's going on, but I have no problems with it!
Don't that's I grammar correct think.
Is it back in black though?
...Bad joke is bad.
Goodish chapter, noticed a couple mistakes, not story-breaking ones though.
Hm....decent chapter...caught a couple errors here and there. I shall point some out.
"Unmeaningly ran into a pony"
Do you mean something like "Unintentionally"? Unmeaningly doesn't sound right to me...
-"Pinkie popped her head up from behind the counter, saying, "Hey! You're not a Poniet!"-
Unneeded quotation mark at the beginning, and what in Luna is a Poniet?
Last error that I will correct:
"And their Magic!"
Wrong spelling of They're, and magic shouldn't be capitalized...
Otherwise, I'm liking this story. (I'm just a major nazi for everything spelling,grammar, and punctuation)
2989028 Poniet is most likely a reference to the soviets
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I think we've been through this in the comments before...
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May correct be you
2990934
I usually never read the comments :3
And I think I overlooked that "Poniet" thing in earlier chapters, if what I've seen in the comments(that I decided to read) pointing that out.
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I don't get on the site for like, three days, and then when I get back you've made like 5 chapters! I'm not sure what's going on, but I have no problems with it!
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Same here!