Chapter 33:
I spruced up the descriptions some, and changed some wording. A lot of it sounded unclear and awkward so it should flow better now.

Chapter 34:
There were a decent amount of typos and I was rather shocked. They were all technically words, so it might explain why spellcheck didn't catch them. Same deal as before, some descriptions were kind of unclear, and I added in some extra imagery.

Eh, saw several annoying typos and a few places to spruce up the wording. Also there were some unclear actions I was able to tidy up, nothing too serious imo.

This was a longer and more difficult chapter. I spruced up the descriptions and general formatting. there was some stuff that I felt could have been described or worded better. At the end, I added in a character and put in a few more things with General Versa. I might add a bit more later, but for now I'm content with it.

Exactly what the title says! Chapter 40: Trial By Fire part 4

God I love writing action, but it can get so annoying. Do you know how hard it is to condense a scene to as few words as possible, while everything still keeps at an intense, clear pace?

Best typo in KOTD: "She grabs the back of his head and holds it still, as she drives a knee spike into his forehead. She shoves his dad bod away." Christ that's been in there this entire time

Grading Scale:

A (fantastic episode)
A- (an excellent episode with at least one flaw)
B+ (a great episode with a couple of flaws)
B (a good episode which still could have been better)

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Okay so decided to edit chapter 12 another time because...well it's super long. But anyways I got the next chapter ready to go so keep an eye on your feeds tomorrow! Thank you all for being patient! This next chapter's a dousy so do me a solid and leave me some feedback please and thank you!

I know I haven't posted anything in a while, my life got flipped upside down. not gonna bother going into detail, just the next chapter of KOTD that I wanna edit is a big one. I'm saving the next new chapter for when I feel that my beginning chapters are better. I'd like to draw more people in and I'm sure after they got halfway through the tragedy of chapters 1-11, they probably gave up.

Hope you enjoy it!

I keep looking at how many chapters I've edited, vs how many I have to go and it just seems so daunting. I know later chapters will be a lot easier, like 20s or so, but still....

Holy crap there were so many typos! I'm friggin shocked! I thought I had written this when my standards had improved, but apparently not! Maaaan editing 8.8k words takes a while. I'm happier with it though. A lot happier. It looked like it had never had a spellcheck before though, which is weird cause I coulda swore that everything after chapter 20 was put through microsoft's reviewer thing. You see, this was back before I found out that Gdocs spellcheck was awful, and loved to change "its" to

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I haven't reread chapters 30-40 in a looong time. It feels so weird cause there's scenes I completely forgot about so in a way it's like reading my on book for the first time. I wonder how it would feel to have amnesia then getting to read your own books. Anyways, besides weird formatting and some sentences that could use sprucing up, didn't find much in the way of editing. Man Linkin Park really helps with editing these more emotional chapters.

The moral of the Season: Don't mess with the Tree of Harmony!

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Added in some extra dialogue, some better descriptions to better depict how people are feeling. I think the entire thing flows better now. I stil gotta watch how I keep starting every sentence with "I did this" or "I did that"

*Cracks neck* sweet lord these long chapters are murder. I mean yes they're long, but I've read them so many damn times, especially this chapter. I had spent a long time trying to make the descriptions short, sweet, meaningful and poetic. I still saw some previous dialogue problems, back when I'd say the body language of who's talking, then put in a comma, followed by the dialogue. Granted this was one of the first scenes I wrote before I had actually began the story. Before chapter 1 was even

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Another longish chapter, but I think I started editing this one but never finished. There was a lot of basic dialogue that needed some sprucing up and plenty of room for more flavorful vocabulary everywhere. Didn't see much in the way of editing, besides a few unclear descriptions and actions. The ending seems s tad cliche, but this can't really go any other direction. It may also be that I'm tired of re-reading all these chapters over again. I'll confess though, these later chapters are

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Sorry for going so silent there, guys. But, uh, a lot of stuff kinda came up, unfortunately.
Work, home life, mah own health...ya know, all that fun stuff.
But! Despite all that, this is a post of good news!
So, as most of ya might be aware, the Southern East Coast is getting pummeled by Hurricane Matthew.
And thus, Ah don't have work cause the weather is pretty gnarly.

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I finally finished it! Thank you everyone for being so patient! The past few weeks have sucked ASS! Do me a solid and leave me some feedback on this next chapter, please and thank you?

I know I said I'd be posting one more chapter then doing massive rewrites but...

I really wanna just continue the story for a bit since you all were so patient with me. I'm already a 1000 words in on my next chapter. What is everypony's opinion so far? Are you finding the trial interesting? I wanted to take a small break from all the combat since it takes so much time to write and describe everything. Feel free to message me your predictions, but please don't post spoilers publicly.