TPost Mortem

• MLP: FiM
• Slice of Life

Rainbow Dash has something to ask Twilight.

• Twilight
• Rainbow Dash

Whirl Hoof · 2.8k words  ·  109  4 · 1.7k views

Review: Post Mortem

Tags: Slice of Life

Summary: This is about Rainbow Dash and Twilight Sparkle bonding their friendship.

Critic: I have to say it was a good slice of life… The ending is pretty funny and I clearly enjoyed it.  It may have a small proportion of flow being a tiny bit choppy for some people.  Not the only thing I think  you are missing a “ “  at oh Celestia… but I could be wrong on that… but who knows…  

The flow of this fiction is clearly a 7/10. There were some parts that seemed a bit choppy.

The word choices are clearly an 8/10 are good.

The idea for the slice of life is pretty much 10/10 no questions asked.

The grammar is a 8/10

Final score  is clearly somewhere at least near an 8/10.