Long Road Home
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Grammar: 10/10
Everything is well written. As far as I could tell, no grammatical or spelling errors.
Characterization: 8/10
Trixie is written as would be expected after her reformation, and Clara is written as a realistic young girl. My only complaint is that the other human characters fall flat.
Use of Show Canon: 10/10
Trixie's history is show consistent.
Plot Consistency: 9.5/10
Nothing happens that isn't logically explained by other events in the story. The letters from Twilight are ignored through the middle section, though, despite them playing a major part in the story.
Use of OCs: 8/10
Clara is very well written, having a worldview you'd expect from a 7 year old. The characters who appear in Chapter 7 and the epilogue fall flat, and felt irrelevant to the plot.
Coherence: 8/10
The story flows well from one chapter to the next, with the exception of Chapter 7 and the epilogue, which felt slightly forced. A bit of difficulty determining where the perspective changes from one character to the next due to poorly made page breaks.
Extra:
Slice of Life: 2/5
The individual chapters could qualify as slice of life, but the story has an overall more adventurous feel.
Human: 5/5
A definitive change to the normal plot of human dies and resurrects in Equestria. Having a child protagonist makes the story feel different than the typical self-insert human OC.

Total: 60.5/70 86.4% Accepted
Surprisingly, a good HiE story. It doesn't have a Mary Sue OC like most others, and keeps you hooked until the end.

3660187 Thanks! Your review captures exactly what I felt was up with the story, from the great HiE to the fantastic handling of Trixie post reformation. I agree the other humans are of little interest but *shrugs* they aren't exactly the key of the story

Glad you liked it!

3660187 And BlackSkulls is apparently too shy to say it here but she wanted to thank you for the review!