Yeah i know i keep on bloging stuff but would like some opinions if this is a good scene or not for the new chapter, plus a sneak peak what changes would you like?

“Please open the door, and have him hand the money to you, I’ll collect my cut after we finished our business. How long did he request.” Her voice was sounding more professional though Rumble wished he could’ve walked in right than so he could meet this mysterious woman. His heart pounding faster as Rumble imagined what he might’ve gotten himself into. Could he run away? Could he just take his money and get the hell out of here. But he was sure they wouldn’t give him his money back,
“We exchanged the money He’ll be coming in.” Luke grabbed the door, his fingers wrapping around it while Rumble looked over to him with a nod, as Rumble took the step forwards heading inside the room.
The door suddenly closed behind him. He heard a small clicking sound as Rumble stood there. The lights were dimmed. Red ambient light, with a bed with red satin sheets made of silks. The music slowly began though when Rumble turned around seeing where it might’ve came from he saw no one. He saw a record player. The record moving as it continued on with its passionate music.
“Please sit on the bed get comfortable, I’ll come on down pretty soon.” Such a calming voice as Rumble followed her orders. When he sat down on the bed. That was when he realized something. His hands touching the sheets his fingers suddenly got stuck.
“What the?” Rumble said as he pulled back but found himself unable tp pull back. He reached over trying to pull his hand away. He pulled his hand away, when he realized his hand was covered in red silk. The way it felt like, they were like cobwebs.
“Fuck?” Rumble muttered suddenly feeling scared, though that was when suddenly without warning he felt his hand hit with something shot his hand down hitting the bed. Rumbles eyes widened more, as he heard the soft voice calling out,
“Said the fly to the Spider.”

Comments

[Airy Words]

Definitely cool. The customer wants something exciting and gets just what he asked for.

I don’t see Rumble getting hurt, though.