Hindsight is 20/20

TL;DR: I've updated chapter 1 to read better, and am maybe planning on doing the same to the two after that.

So, I was skimming over the previous chapters of my story so I could be sure I didn't make dumb mistakes while writing the next chapter. It didn't take me long to notice just how badly I described the thread that Anon came across in chapter one. Now, I can tell you why this happened. As I've stated before, I wrote this story on 4chan's /mlp/ board back in 2014. I wrote it in response to this post right here.

So, this is where the premise of the story came from. As you can imagine, it's easy to gloss over details when writing something when they've already been written for you just a little ways above. The first two or three chapters of this story are basically direct translations from greentext with a little prose thrown in for good measure. I think I said it before, but I'll say it again just in case: I've since stopped copying and pasting the original story and am now re-writing it from scratch, using the original as a general guideline.

I've also decided to clean up the first chapter to basically include that 4chan post word for word so that the entire premise of the story isn't glossed over and new readers don't wonder what the fuck I'm talking about in later chapters. This has also made me want to flat out re-write the first few chapters so that they make a better first impression.

I think that's what I'll do before finishing the next chapter.

I really hope both old and new readers will enjoy the revisions I am going to make.

(Also forgive me for the lack of updates; Red Dead Redemption 2 came out on the PC at the start of the month, and I'm only just now digging myself out of the hole I dug myself while playing it.)