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Nehem


I write. The voices command me to do so.

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To our knowledge, Earth is a pretty ordinary planet. Despite the craziness that goes on in our world, gravity keeps us on the ground, air lets us breathe, and food and water keep us going. On this ordinary planet, on an ordinary night in an ordinary house lives an ordinary person. On that night, that person makes a hypothetical choice before bed.
    That ordinary person just so happens to be you; and that choice might not be as hypothetical as you might think.


(Just your typical second person story starring a person named Anonymous. Rated T for language and jokes about dangly bits. Thanks to my friend for the cover art.)

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 46 )

Red is my favorite color. I hope to see more dislikes than the one I added.

Comment posted by DisplacedWriter deleted Feb 19th, 2019

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It's an image a friend of mine made when I wrote this back in 2014. He goes under the name "Science Mango" on this website, but he hasn't logged on here for about five years.

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Ah, thanks! Does it happen to be uploaded on Derpibooru? If it is, do you happen to know the link, and if it's not, do you want me to upload it (credit will be given to your friend) so that more people can see it? Thanks!

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To my knowledge, it hasn't yet, so feel free to do so if you'd like!

I hate this premise for the immense chance of you breaking our hearts at the end :pinkiesad2:

Regardless it’s an enjoyable read thus far!

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Thanks brah, hopefully I can fix this thing up and keep it interesting til the end.

I quite enjoy the bittersweet ending juxtaposed with the fugly ass Wario. Thank you for that.

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Any time man, any time :heart:

“Do you remember what happened before woke up here?”

You might want to correct that

Nice story so far, can't wait for the next chapter.

(Also I'm thinking of doing a reading of this story.)

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Ayy, thanks for that.

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Thanks, bruh. Send it to me if you end up doing it, I'm interested in seeing what you could do!

Haven’t had any issues with the formatting thus far, still quite enjoyable

everything that that breaks the laws of reality.

Found another typo.

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I like how I had to look at this like six times to realize just what was wrong. Thanks, lol.

Well, the certainly could have gone better. But hey, at least you won the staring contest

Here is another typo...

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And here I am always talking shit about people making simple mistakes like this and not noticing them. My honor is damaged, therefore I believe it's time for me to retire from the whole writing thing and finally commit seppuku like I've always wanted.

Anyway, thanks for pointing it out! The typo's fixed and my shame is hidden.

aside from disliking everything that I tend to type

No reason for that, it's pretty great so far.

Glad to see this is still kickin. I’m sure it’s futile since I’m a rando on the internet but don’t beat your self up too much, your story is very enjoyable thus far.

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Thank you both! However, I think I phrased the author's note wrong. I just meant that it took me a long time to post this because I was unsatisfied with the quality at the time. I don't really hate this chapter since I've changed it enough to increase the quality.

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That's usually how people describe me, so that sounds about right.

Another good chapter. No typos from what I saw.

Wel,I finally got a good enough recoding.
Here is the link to the playlist for the story.

I should have have the rest of the chapters finished and uploaded within the next month

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Thanks, I'll check it out when I have the chance!

Fluttershy’s face seems to convey sadness as she looks down at her hooves.

”I hope my friends are okay…”

Welp. It just had to become sad. :unsuresweetie:

Excuse me while I go to a corner and feel guilty.

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Ayy, you can come on over and join me, I enjoy spending my days doing the exact same thing!

Good to have you back :yay:
In my opinion Fluttershy works pretty well here, since she's only talking to one person who is also more like an "animal" to her it's plausible that she's not extremely shy.
I'm wondering how all the little lies and secrets that anon keeps from her will play out.

if she’s seen, it’s also possible that creepy-ass shadows will appear and drag her kicking and screaming into some hell dimension.

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I suggest giving it a try sometime. The hell monsters are a really fun bunch once you attend your third weekend with them. Why else would I update so infrequently?

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Oh hey, you found it! I was gonna make a blog post about this and might still, but since you posted it, I'd might as well explain myself. First up is what you linked. That is a remake if a story that I wrote in 2014. If you read the remake and compare it to what I wrote on here, you will probably see that it is pretty much the same, just in prose and with a few extra things added. That's because this story was just going to be that one but in prose. Converting that over however, meant I would have to read it. Let me just say, I'm not a big fan of my own work, and often times I begin seeing flaws that I wish to correct. Well, this time I began seeing a lot of flaws I didn't like in terms of the storyline as a whole. One thing lead to another and before I knew it, that story became a reference for a remake that would be put on here. I began to overthink stuff and get overwhelmed, and then I went to the store to buy cigarettes and never came back. I really don't have a lot in life keeping me from writing right now, so maybe I might just continue converting this to prose and post it here, even if it means living in a constant state of cringe while doing so.

It is a pretty cute story 💛 fluttershy is my favorite

"I'll be back as soon as possible."

*Leaves us and never come back*
"Bruh"

God damn it, he died didn't he?

”Oh my… These are in deep…” muses, actually taking your arm in a hoof.

Another typo; should be "Oh my... These are in deep..." she muses

She takes it with a sheepish grin. Once her flapjack is covered with syrup, her next action surprises you just a bit. She goes headfirst into the plate, then back up, emerging with a piece of the food in her mouth. Right. Ponies. Hooves.

Pretty sure ponies have used forks a few times in the show; I think there were a couple when Ponyville hosted a feast for Princess Celestia, and at breakfast before Starlight swapped their cutie marks

the massive pile of snow at its base.

Its

You breathe a sigh of relief, thankful that she hasn’t wondered out into the world.

Wandered

judging by the path society has taken in the past few years, ridiculous seems to be the norm.

Too true ;-;

“I guess we’ll just have to keep learning from each other, huh?” You ask, having mutually walked with her back to your recreational room with her in tow.

"Mutually" and "with her in tow" are redundant.

“I’m not gonna lie when I say that it must have taken a lot of courage to do that. What happened that lead you to do it, anyway?”

Led

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