Preview of my Second Story · 1:12am Sep 30th, 2019
So, if you read comments, you know that I'm working on a second story that should be much shorter than A Sweetie Dreamland, and very different. To give you an idea of what I'm working on, here's a little... trailer, so to say. Enjoy!
"Do we have a deal?"
"Deal!"
"Then open this door, and your dreams will come true."
"You will not believe it! I spotted a strange manor in the Everfree! It wasn't there before!" shouted Rainbow Dash.
"A manor?" asked Twilight.
"They haven't come back since yesterday," said Apple Bloom in worry.
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"Should we tell Spike to warn the princess?" asked Sweetie Belle.
"You are worrying over nothing," said Scootaloo. "Nothing can happen to Rainbow Dash. But if you are so worried, we can go and see that manor." She grinned. "Who knows, it may be the occasion for us to get our Cutie Marks."
"Your friends aren't dead," the old stallion assured. "Why would the ghosts capture them if it was to kill them? If they wanted to kill you, they could have done so the moment they attacked."
"But what can we do to save them?"
"We could go warn princess Celestia, but I fear that by the time she comes, the worse may happen. I could use my Poltergust to go and save them myself, but as you saw, the years are piling on me. I can still catch a few ghosts, but I don't think that I would be able to fight the dozens, maybe even hundreds of ghosts that are haunting this manor." He looked at the filly, uncertain. "I only see one solution, but I don't like it."
They approached a wall where there were many portraits of various ponies under a big drawing of the manor. Apple Bloom looked at all of them in wonder, and horror.
"Those are the targets that you may encounter in your exploration of the manor. The Gem Family."
The ghost of the stallion rose from his rocking chair, and many books started floating around him, their pages bloody as they opened and closed like fanged jaws. They all faced Apple Bloom who was paralyzed in fear. With one thrust of his hoof, the stallion then sent the books to devour the filly.
Glaring at her, the muscled stallion took the two weights, and started slamming them together as he slowly floated toward Apple Bloom, threatening to crush her head between them.
Before she knew it, Apple Bloom was grabed by the fat mare, and was immersed in the water of the bathtub to be drowned.
"I couldn't find any portaits of the servants, but expect to also encounter them."
As soon as he spotted her, the butler in fire floated toward Apple Bloom, forehooves raised, ready to give her the same fate that he got.
Apple Bloom quickly jumped back to avoid being beheaded by the shear of the ghost gardener before she readied the Poltergust to not give him another chance.
"And there's a high possibility that you encounter other powerful ghosts that decided to invite themselves in the manor."
The stallion rose his giant knife, then brought it down on the poor mouse. Not being able to control herself, Apple Bloom barely held back the content of her stomach with a gulp. But this small sound was enough for the ghost to hear her, and he turned his head to look at her, showing his sharp teeth as he smiled happily.
"Aah! Fresh pony meat!"
A long red appendage suddenly came out of one of the jars to wrap itself around her hind legs before it started dragging her. Not wanting to know what awaits her if she reached this jar, Apple Bloom grabs the handle of the Poltergust and activates it.
"But all of them aren't priorities. The one ghost that you must catch to end this nightmare and, hopefully, save your friends is this one!" Smart Spirit pointed at the drawing of... some purple ghost that absolutely didn't look like a pony. "Bogmire."
[...]
"So, despite all this, do you still want to continue?"
"If ah say no, my friends and Applejack are as good as dead. Ah must save them!"
Apple Bloom closed her eyes as she heard the hoofteps coming closer, trying to control her breathing despite her panic as she heard "Apple Bloooom! Apple Blooooom! Where are youuuu?" Slowly, the hoofteps came closer and closer, and Apple Bloom had to put her hooves on her muzzles to force herself to not make any sound.
They suddenly stopped just in front of the closet.
The door opened.
"Found y-" Paf!
The now giant doll suddenly looked up toward her, and got up before approaching her with a childish giggle. "Come play with me."
"We will all be together... forever."
Whenever I see: "Do we have a deal?" I can't help of Atriox in War of Wits The Sale. And after that's done you'll be doing Sequel A Sweetie in Dreamland right, I wonder would win A Sweetie in Dreamland Sweetie Belle or Sweetie Belle Chronicles Sweetie Belle?
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I will do the two stories at the same time. If I finish A Sweetie Dreamland before this one, then I will do the sequel as soon as I think it is ready. But it's very probable that I finish this one before A Sweetie Dreamland. Like I said, it will be rather short, only five or six chapters.
As for who would win between my Sweetie and the one from the Sweetie Chronicles, well... I haven't read the most recent chapters, so I have no idea.
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Oh okay, let me know when you have.
Wait a minute, your comments suggested that your sequel would be based on Super Smash Bros, not Luigi's Mansion!
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This is another story that I will work on in parallel of A Sweetie Dreamland. Look in the comments in chapter 79.