Help again · 7:48pm Dec 14th, 2016
Hey everyone. I got the other chapter of Return well underway, but i feel like its missing something very important. I want to avoid making it like Treacherous where the main star acts very out of character. I'll post a link to the chapter right now, bear in mind that this will change at least another dozen times then what i have posted.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10399069/11/YF54-s-Dust-Bin
That'll lead you to the in progress chapter titled Greedy Generosity. To Summarize, Rarity goes to a Noble party and every time she sees her reflection, she sees her Nightmare Rarity self. I'll let the rest speak for itself, but what i want to know is this:
Should i have N.Rarity tell every sin of Greed that Rarity has done in one fell swoop like it is so in the chapter OR should i have Rarity meet with a noble and have N.Rarity begin the flashback related to said noble pony?
If you guys have any other suggestions, please feel free to inform me of them in the comments below.
I'd say go with what you think. But honestly I think it would be a kind of waste given how Twilight has seen and known about Rarity's greed, albeit not to that extent but still. Treating her friends as slaves, forgetting Twilight's birthday for nobles, and a bunch of other crap.