Constructive criticism requested

Hey everyone, Celtic here. i'll try and make this short and to the point. I'm here to ask you, the readers of my story, what do you not like about my story and how do you think I can improve or fix it?

it can be anything including but not limited to plot, characters, pacing, language, references, writing style, etc. any and all comments are welcome, but still be civil with negativity.

P.S. I know my grammar/punctuation tends to be strongly lacking and I'm already working on correcting that

Comments

[Heartland]

The only thing I've ever really had a problem with is something you've more or less fixed, and that's focusing on other uninteresting characters like Mise's relatives.

[Lord Weesus Christ]

4280831 yeah, I myself, looking back on it can agree with you there. most of those were experimental and they're longevity were dependent on how you and the other readers perceived them