Hope I still got it in me to review... · 2:26pm Oct 19th, 2016

My second review and again, I'm wondering if I managed to shake off the rust... The last review, I was most definitely proud of myself seeing how far I've gotten in the reviewing scene. If any of you wish to see a link to the reviews in questions, don't worry, I'll always link them below if you're ever curious about it. Now with that out of the way, I shall now review the story that was second place in a writing contest for the D'aww award called Scribblefest. Mind you, this is the first time I've heard of this Scribblefest contest in question and hearing that it was in second for the D'aww award does tell me that I'm going to enjoy this

Story: Marble's Horizon

Tags: Slice of Life

Rating: Everyone

Characters: Pie Sisters

As the title suggest, the story here focuses on the youngest (I presume) of the Pie family, Marble. With the word horizon in mind, I initially thought that she was going to travel and I won't lie, I kind of called it there. My biggest concern however was how it was handled. Was It successful? Let's find out shall we?

First off is how the Pie Family was portrayed, most especially Marble since she is the main focus. Just as I begun to read the story, I can already see that the characterization was just right on. It has been awhile since I recalled the episode where the Pie family first made their appearance but I still recall how their characters act. Limestone was still her abrasive self no doubt and her parents are what they are. I really don't have a word to describe them but they are not OOC, that is for certain. Marble, she's definitely herself alright and I loved every second of reading her thoughts. I can at least understand where she was going on with her thoughts especially since I share her problems with expressing myself. The details to her emotions, from her strongest to her weakest, were the highlight in my eyes. They were showed with excellence as we see not only her views of her family but of her own nature.

Now towards the conflict. This is where the word horizon on the title comes into play. During the story, three things influenced her to do something only Pinkie and Maud have done before nor has she thought of until now. One was the rising Sun from the mountains, the next was that she noticed these specific words in question on a note Go find your own! and lastly, she bought a book that details the locations of every city and important landmarks and reads through it. These three simple things were the starting point of her thinking on partaking her own journey like her two sisters did. However, with this in mind, there was also conflict. As she was an introvert, she was not use to getting out of her comfort zone. Her own struggles were portrayed excellently as she debated on what to do about this. Should she stay silent or speak about this to her parents? This hit me personally as I've said above, this was something I had to struggle with during my youth. I was able to connect with her easily as I myself, had trouble to even express myself, always being the silent and maybe shy type.

The story's writing was, for the most part, magnificent in my eyes. I did a second read-through of the story to see any spelling or grammar issues and while I'm not a keen eye myself, I saw little to no issues about it in question. The concept of the story was something all of us can emphasize with and it was done with bright colors. So with all that said and done, I was most definitely happy to have read this in question.

Score: 8.5/10

Simple Fate, Touch Acceptance, Blessed Conclusion

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