Hiatus- Extra Editing.

Editing some grammar errors, story will be back momentarily.

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[link4]

good to see an active investment. :)

[L3thAlPwnE]

4245008
I just wanna stop the dislikes from growing went from 8 to ten last night. Sadly no one is leaving reasons why as they dislike. So editing is all i can do.

[link4]

4245031 meh... nothing you can do about that really. don't worry, you'll get more likes

[L3thAlPwnE]

4245038
It's a bad habit for me to have, but at least all the comments I've gotten have been constructive. Btw I'm starting your story as we speak. I'm going to need a break. I've been filling out paperwork and trying to edit.

[link4]

4245045 ugh... paperwork. it's like a lecture i have to listen to- those put me to sleep. rather i want it to or not. xD

[L3thAlPwnE]

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Now my editng tool keeps closing before i can save! I had to star over 4 times in a row.

[link4]

4245293 ouch... and that's tedious work too.

[L3thAlPwnE]

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Finally got it right this time. now i wanna take a break. If you ever feel like just chatting, or exchanging feedback anything, lemme know. I'll edit chapter two tomorrow and put the story off hiatus. Thanks for keeping me sane dude.

[L3thAlPwnE]

4245319
Wanna see what I got for The story by blake and enclave so far?

[link4]

4245365 no problem! i was a member for a year or 2 before i posted. and sure, let's see what you gotfor it so far.

[L3thAlPwnE]

4245719
Sorry for the wait btw, had stuff to do.

[link4]

4245818 no problem, i took a nap xD then i started editing another story. :P

[L3thAlPwnE]

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Oh, maybe I need to start taking naps, my sleep pattern is weird.

Here you go, They said Oc's were cool and I find it easier to make up a character than use an established one. It's almost done probably needs less show and more tell.

Jot A. Doodle has never been fond of his body. In fact, he has gone to great lengths to hide it.His entire life he hid his frame under long sleeve shirts over shirts and just about any article of cloth he could. JD used to be a very chubby kid, so he decided to lose weight. Now he is made fun of for being too weak and scrawny. Knowing he had to change this, he agreed to be a part of the Naturalist club. Now that he is standing in front of a mirror. Suddenly he finds this not to be such a good idea.“ What was I thinking?” he sighs. Looking over his body, he cringes. His skin pale, highlighting the flaming locks on his head. Even if JD wanted to, he couldn't stand out any less. Breathing in an air of defeat, JD grabs his duffel bag and decides to just go home. Or so he thought. While he criticizes his body in the mirror he didn't notice a pink hand that hands him his bag as he reaches for it. Feeling a warm limb brush him he gives a yelp as he jumps, turning whiter than he already is.“Whoopsie! Didn’t mean to scare ya like that!” says the bouncy-haired stranger..“Who are you?! And why are you in here? JD asks. His eyes grow wide and his face turns scarlet after realizing the girl was in the buff. “ ARE YOU NAKED?!” The girl simply giggles at him, snorting in between breaths. “No, I’m PinkiePie” JD. blinks at her,”That only answers one question, why are you in the buff?!” “Well, this is a Naturalist club party! Isn't that why you are naked too?"JD felt a knot in his stomach, he completely forgot he stripped down to look himself over. His cheeks flushed with shame. He begins to unzip his bag, removing flannel shirt from it and throwing over his shoulders.“This was a mistake,a bloody mistake!’ he panics. “Now hold on there, mister! Where do you think you’re going?

[link4]

4245855 hmm, good start.

long sleeve shirts over shirts

just shirts? sorry, you weren't clear on it. xD just a rough sketch atm so it's no big deal. i like it so far.