Memorial Day Update (Revision List) · 9:41am May 30th, 2016
First things first: Happy Memorial Day and a sincere thank you to all those who have served and sacrificed.
Alright, so it occurred to me that if I had listed every single one of the edits which I made, you guys would start a petition to have me locked up for being a psychotic perfectionist ( which I do not deny of being ). Not even exaggerating, some of my changes were so insignificant that I looked back over one story and nearly forgot which words that I had literally just changed 
Anyway, this is the list of the most notable and important revisions:
Sour Sweet, the Christmas Parade Critic – Added the detail of Starlight Glimmer’s beret having a small, silver equal sign on it to make the Che Guevara joke stronger ( he had a silver star on his ). This detail was inserted in The Sour Sweet First Date as well. Also, someone once commented that Rainbow Dash should have ponied up for helping Derpy out so I added a short paragraph stating that she does, but no one even notices because the moment rightfully belongs to Derpy ( Dashie, of course, is cool with this ).
Shy and Sour – Someone once questioned why I chose Chrysalis of all characters to be a therapist. I didn’t have a legit answer at the time, other than I thought she was cool. Therefore, I added a bit more to the beginning and there’s now a joke about Doctor Chrysalis “having quite the hypnotic personality which compelled one to spill their guts to” to attempt to justify why she’s portrayed as a therapist.
Sour Sweet Scrappers – Was once harshly criticized that Gilda’s revelation of abuse was told within narration and was pointless. I have revised this to where Sour Sweet and Gilda now have a short talk and this fact comes up. Just to be clear, the information is EXACTLY the same as it was in the previous narration. It’s just now in dialogue form. Maybe presented in that way, people will better understand the moral that I was trying to make. Also, since many wondered what the boyfriend’s reaction to the selfie was, I inserted one based on the comments by Kul and Wiriamuzu. ( "A text? I wonder what she wants t- OH MY GOD! THE DUCK LIPS JUST MAKE IT WORSE!!!" )
Sour Sweet Dreams – Inserted more lines making it clearer that the boyfriend knew about the Bitter Honey hallucination BEFORE his dream.
Sour Sweet Sorrow – Alright, this had the most changes. Added a part where Sour admits that she wants to have a good relationship with her dad again, making it clearer why she would want to forgive him. Altered a lot of Mr. Sweet’s dialogue to make it clearer that his motivation was for Sour to get proper help, while still further acknowledging that he was being a complete COWARD about it. By popular demand for some punishment, the boyfriend now PUNCHES Mr. Sweet. Added a part where the boyfriend tries to apologize to Sour for not taking her problems seriously, but she’s still too out of it to properly respond. Once again by popular demand, the boyfriend now furiously tells Mr. Sweet about the attempted suicide and even THREATENS that if anything happens to her in the future, he’ll have to answer to him.
Okay, everyone got it? Now, if any of this comes back up in future stories, hopefully you’ll remember where it’s coming from.
Eh, I think that threat and punch to the dad was a bit overboard, but at least we get ((you)) back to its original intention if those response are what the majority of the readers wants here
Good to see that you tackle this revisions quickly tho, cant wait for whatever else you had in mind for stories
A threat and a punch?... Really?.......
THAT IS *UCKING AWESOME!!! I AM NOW GOING TO REREAD THE LATEST ONE TO SEE THE EPIC CHANGES!!!
Also: Bruh. You should have [reader's name here] tell Sour Sweet to imagine him fighting the bad hallucinations. Just a thought I had.
Happy Memorial Day.
I'm no writer, but I think that you should never succumb to a popular demand. Don't let the readers' emotions sway you, or you'll be getting bombarded with demands and requests.
I think, the punch is out of line, given that you are still a guest. Moreover, you've been hammering in the version of the boyfriend as a timid person, and punching someone is the last thing a timid person would do.
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I try to be an entertainer. Entertainers want to make people happy if they see ways they can.
What does it matter if "You" are a guest? In hindsight, I realize that Mr. Sweet needed a good punch for good measure.
I've had him have his manic emotional moments as well, such as being aggressive towards Sour Sweet in the very first story. Also, you're forgetting Shy and Sour where I made Fluttershy cause Gilda's nose to gush blood. Everyone loses their cool now and again.
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Well, so long as YOU think that it was appropriate, then good.
But you've just opened the door to myriads of requests.....I want a Trixie cameo! Oh please please please, make a Trxie story! She could be a part time performer at a local Amusement Park, since we know their city has one, where Sour would take the crusaders for a fun day.... And Sunny Flare! You do a great Sunny flare! She is terribly under appreciated. Oh oh, and Aria, definitely Aria -- I want to see them fight over something. Of course, Aria would hand Sour's tiny ass to her, since she has 1000 of fighting experience. But losing every now and then is also good for her growth. Ooooohhh, and Sunset, of course! Sour could learn a great deal from the best female leader since the Jedi Exile.
And that's a joke, if it's not clear. Tho....
Sweet. I'll make certain to reread everything here tonight if I can find enough time
3983706 Man , i just feel really bad for Sour Sweet.
Hey , i would step in with the boyfriend.