Taking some advice from another author that has helped me · 6:34pm Dec 29th, 2015
This one for the tagged story
Here is his advice
As far as the story goes I'd say that this chapter has a lot of set up and not a lot of payoff, and the beginning is honestly a bit mundane. I'd say that you don't really need to explain to us what the intentions of every general is, instead, you could give hints using their actions and mannerisms to show us what they intend to do, it would be faster and hopefully more interesting. The battle is really the pinnacle of the chapter, but it seems a little silly when it ends with something that reads "Top Secret: Evil Plan." It feels a little gimmicky. I would suggest that they find Lennex research and information on certain parts of Equestria and the Empire that leads them to suspect that these are the places that the Lennex forces are going to attack.
He is speaking of Chapter 8 of Imperial Liberation of Equestria.
And I will have to agree. The fight itself could've gone longer and better descriptive.
Now, I also need to either take out a few things or change them. So the next chapters, 7 and 8 won't be out until the New Year.
