Revisions Completed and Uploaded!/Chapter 4 News · 3:40pm Oct 22nd, 2015
So, I'm bad with release dates. I said Friday but I got through all the revising the Pre-Reader asked me to do last night, so I decided "Screw it, give the people the new thing!" Thus, I have uploaded the new and improved first three chapters of The Chance of a Lifetime for your viewing pleasure!
A quick list of things I changed from the original upload:
* I've endeavored to stay true to one perspective per chapter, with the first two being from Rarity's POV and the third being from Twilight's. I was told that I have a bad habit of head-hopping between perspectives, so I'll be making a more concerted effort to stay with the character I start the chapter with from here on out.
* Related to the above, but Twilight is now getting a sub-plot since I had to stick with her perspective in Chapter 3. I won't spoil what it is, but it's related to a new conflict I'm developing between her and Rarity.
* There are grammatical and syntax fixes all over the gaff.
* Finally, I had to simplify Sweetie Belle's little speech in Chapter 2 since on a second read-through it seemed too sophisticated for her age. I also toned down Rarity's reaction to a similar degree since the original seemed a tad incongruous with the simplified tone of the preceding paragraph.
And now that that's out of the way, here's some news on Chapter 4, and how I'll be writing from here on out; I had to scrap the first draft of Chapter 4 because I was both dissatisfied with where it was going and it wasn't measuring up to the new standards I've set for myself after my first submission to EQD. I want to make sure that the quality stays consistent throughout the story, so it'll probably take me more time to get new chapters out as I'll be doing more thorough proofreading on my end. It'll probably be more like a week between chapters compared to the four/five days of the first three when I originally uploaded them.
Once again, thanks so much for your patience regarding this. Once I get Ch. 4 uploaded I'm going to be re-submitting to EQD and hopefully it'll get in (I'll try to request the same Pre-Reader since they'll know what to look for compared to the first draft.) Here's hoping for the best! 
The changes to the first two chapters were minor and Sweetie Belle does sound more her age. I really like the changes to the third chapter. Using Twilight' POV did add to the overall story line.
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Thanks so much for your feedback, it's great to know that this has gone over well. I spent the better part of the last week doing this and the Twilight segment gave me the most pause for thought, so thank you again for the compliment