R4 (Reactions, Reviews, Reference, Redirection) #0168

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Here are five slightly edited old reviews:
Thirty Dollars by Ezn
I Can Wait by Eakin
Dangerous by totallynotabrony
The Cellist Said Yes by psp7master
Roar by Loyal

Thirty Dollars by Ezn
[story link] [my original review]

Hee. Very short, silly, and simple. If it was longer it would be dull, but being this short makes it just a brief little joke.

I Can Wait by Eakin
[story link] [my original review]

Well, this one deserves the sad tag. It’s simple and builds up nicely. Some of the mane six’s reactions are a little off, but that is teeny-tiny nitpicking. If you are looking for a sad fanfic, I’d recommend this one.

Dangerous by totallynotabrony
[story link] [my original review]

This is almost a textbook example of a beginner writer’s attempt at a story. Looking at the author’s previous stories they have been writing for a while, so I’m not sure beginner is exactly the right word. This story was very amateur, but in the just getting started fashion. Basically just a story about veterans and society. Writing was not so good. It was filled with all the mistakes my editor keeps pointing out in my stories to fix, though mine aren’t as bad as this one. So, not recommended unless you really like the premise of Twilight Sparkle trying to make friends with a veteran from the pony army. Not even any cool worldbuilding, it was basically just taking American army stuff and copy-paste into MLP. Go read A Cup Of Joe instead, it’s a much better treatment of the subject on several levels. Mostly because Cup of Joe has several levels.

The Cellist Said Yes by psp7master
[story link] [my original review]

This was decent. The writing good, but lacking originality. The story didn’t have much character voice, but it flowed pretty well. Plus it was nice and short. If you like Vinyl Scratch and Octavia, you should certainly read this. If you don’t, well, you might enjoy this but you aren’t missing anything if you skip it.

Roar by Loyal
[story link] [my original review]

Pretty good. I’d almost call this RUN light. Got the same sort of sense of stylized storytelling from it. Not that it was as good as RUN, but if you like that one you might want to give this a try. Though the Dark tag is justified. Though I did have one nitpick. If Rainbow dash is bad enough to be hooked up to medical machines and apparently can’t fly, why is she still living alone in her cloud house? I’m pretty sure her friends would want to keep her company as much as possible if she was that injured, and not being able to fly makes living in the sky really unsafe and the house is fairly isolated being so far away and nopony can really just drop in to visit except for Fluttershy. Anyway, the writing was pretty good.

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