Either Good, Bad, or Ugly · 3:20am May 10th, 2015
So, my most recent story, +1Up has been met with a great feedback from the audience with over 20 likes and a single number of dislikes. 9 or less last time I checked. Anyhow, I just got me first critique by Sleepy Panda.
Her critique, and I quote...
Plot: 30/50
Storyline: 15/30 Not much happened, but I suppose it’s slice of life, although there’s really no point to it as a story besides introducing the OC. It’s not much of a story, to be honest.
Originality: 15/20 I can’t say it’s a particularly creative idea or anything, but at least there’s no SweetieMash or Button’s mom stuff going on.
Conventions: 21.5/25
Style: 8.5/10 Not a large variety of sentence structure and the paragraphing could use some work, but that’s more than could be said for a lot of stories on here.Grammar/spelling: 13/15 There were errors, sure, but I doubt that the majority of the people reading the story would notice as many as I did. I’ve trained myself to catch every single error, so I can’t ignore errors even if I tried. It did seem as if you made an effort to use proper grammar and capitalization. Also, I didn’t find a single sentence that made me go “Huh? What the heck does this even mean?” So that’s pretty good. I’m grading more on effort here than for how many errors there are because I’d be going way too harsh on people if I did the latter.
Characters: 24/25OCs : 9/10 Not very fleshed-out, but I suppose she’s okay. She has sass and she’s not a Mary Sue, so I’m okay with her. I can’t really find anything to complain about, so that’s that.
Characterization: 15/15 Pretty much how I’d expect Button Mash to act, even though the show has only given us a tiny glimpse of him. I’m basing this largely off of fan works.
Total Score: 75.5 /100
So, this got me thinking, is this story good? Bad? or Ugly? Tell me what you think(thought) But then, what am I worried about. The story got the job done, it got me some followers, views, and likes. Personally, I like the story. It's not like it was a huge project, it was a one shot after all.
