Apr
27th
2015
Please help me improve my story. · 1:19am Apr 27th, 2015
As you may or may not have known, I have made my own account to post my fanfic on this sight like everyone else. The problem I seem to have is that it's been recieving negative feedback and no one seemed to want to comment at all. I still want to post this story so I'm looking for help on how to make it likable for readers. If you happen to like reading something related to thids story, which is an alternate story of the series, please feel free to post on this blog. I would like some advice or to know what exactly I've been doing wrong...
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ColossalGX · 294 views
· Story: My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic: Adventures of the Book of Virtue
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The main thing that I've seen with your story is the fact that you treat omnifarious as a punching bag. not sure about others, but i know that when I read a story, I don't want to only see the main character hurt over, and over, and over again. you seem to be giving the mane six completely new, and in my opinion worse. personalities, while omni is literally just there for the purpose of being hurt, or for comedic relief. If you wish to make it more likable for the readers, then, and again, these are just MY thoughts, get rid of mach faiz, and new moon, and have omni treated better than you have been treating him. Also, give the mane six their old personalities back.
Darklight902 is right. The Omni's getting the short end of the Stick and people are starting to get sick and tired of it. Also what is under Omni's Kilt anyway?