Feedback(YOU MATTER) · 1:18am Jul 9th, 2012
Anypony who wants to pre-read is welcome. The more the maryer.
In case you missed my comment.
Thanks everybody/pony. I'm doing a rewrite slash edit of this, because of the complaints. Some stuff shouldn't make sense, because I'm not spelling it out. Other stuff just sucks because I was having a hell of a time writing this chapter. My main editor is gone for a week, so that didn't help either.
Fourpony and anyone else who has suggestions go ahead and send them by Personal message or post here.
Berry Punch gets the some of the fruits and vegetables to run her juice slash wine business, so she is a neutral party. The mare spying with Spike is supposed to be subtle. If you go back you would probably figure out who it is, but I will write a bit more here to make it less confusing. AJ bucked half an orchard in a day, by herself, while still "helping her friends," So I figured with help from the start and less distractions, it seemed about right. They started at 6AM.
Ill start editing and you guys can send complaints, so I can get this done soon. I hope I'm close to pleasing you.
Spanner out!
cute Twi is cute.
Sorry I wasn't able to help you more with it. I was having one of those days I just couldn't focus. Didn't help I was suffering from a pounding headache. Felt like a trip hammer was going full blast up there.
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It's ok. It happens. I promise it wasn't any brain probers I know.
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Indeed.
I love that gif
220973 Great, just shoot me a pm when you're ready for me to look at it again.