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  • 260 weeks
    First Big Edit Spree

    So a few chapters are done and edited. To explain some changes, Spike and Nashta are now wingless properly, so a lot has changed in the series of events involving them. Sombra is more of a consistent dick rather than a spastic one with a lot clearer goals and better transitions/interactions. I'd love it if ya'll checked it out.

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  • 261 weeks
    I guess im fixing that old story

    Im alive, question is, was I ever dead in the first place?

    I hear all the problems my writing has. I like to think I've gotten better. So Im taking the stuff there now and revising a lot in as few sessions as possible to keep the mentality I need to have consistent action and motivations. I got super off track with what the story was and want to fix that.

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  • 330 weeks
    So since Fim won't update y'all

    New chapter up. Revision on the old one. Fim doesn't want to spam inboxes since its publish date was back in june...like two years ago. Finally back into it. Who knows where it goes from here, but I feel like there might be a small difference in my writing styles...

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  • 375 weeks
    It's almost Easter

    You all know what that meeeans...

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  • 407 weeks
    Recent chapter

    It sucked. It made me realized I had a huge continuity error and it tore my whole plot apart. Im going to rewrite it and adjust that plot to fit the error so that it wont change the whole story. Im very sorry for being so late admitting this. I was afraid of failing and just ignored it, praying it wouldnt be noticed. Im a bad guy. But I'll be working hard to fix it! Taking the chapter down for

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Nov
24th
2014

Because I hate thinking you guys are feeling ignored · 12:13am Nov 24th, 2014

Heres a preview of the next chapter! *Please note that errors should be fixed in the final draft, this is just to show you guys how much I hate sitting on work trying to finish a 6000 word chapter

Things were quiet...
Birds sang in the mornings, and bats cried to the night. All he could do is wait, so while he waited. Applejack gave him different chores to do to keep him busy. Jake was in the middle of bucking a set of trees when the thought occurred to him again...
What if she didn't get the message...?

Few apples fell into the baskets and he moved on to the next tree.

Doubt began nagging at the back of his mind the more idle his thoughts became, bucking and putting a dent in the tree, he moved on to the
next one.

Am I stuck here in this crazy world..?

"Jake?"

Staring at the tree to find the spot to hit, his mind was deeply engrossed in his worry and fear, he found the spot and reared up, hitting the tree hard enough to crack it.

"Jake!" Applejack shouted.

The Clydesdale shook his head and found that he had gone through most of the field and went into an area where the apples were not as ready...

"Applejack...jeez, I'm really sorry. "

She smiled warmly and had a slight worry showing in her eyes. Just that look told him everything he needed to know, she knew he was starting to really lose faith in the princess. If it offended her or maybe just annoyed her was the question he didn't have an answer for, because of course, who questions the almighty raiser of the sun? The hard work had indeed taken his mind off Celestia most of the day, but he would toss and turn at night thinking about his fate, thinking about how impossible it seemed to change anything; maybe at least Applejack would be truthful still...

"Do you think she forgot...?" He asked, catching Applejack off guard.

It took a moment for her to answer...

"I'm sure she'll come soon, sugercube." She said with a reassuring smile.

Jake looked down to avoid her sure gaze, the confidence in her voice was so wrong to him...

The sun was still high in the sky, only a few clouds scattered themselves along the bright blue. Jake looked up and squinted from the glare of
the sun, its overpowering presence; it saw and knew everything that happens under its gaze, and its warmth sheltered all.

So why abandon me...?

Jake looked back down, Applejack's face was showing a bit of the worry she kept in the back of her mind. Soon he felt like the silence had grown from slightly odd to completely awkward. Jake rubbed the back of his head and it loomed like Applejack was about to speak...until a blur of orange, white and yellow blazed between the two, leaving them wide eyed and stunned.

"Faster!" Shouted Applebloom as they grew harder to see in the thick of the apple trees.

"I know! I'm try-" Scootaloo tried to say, Sweetie Belle cutting her off with grim news...

"Look out! Treeeeeeee!"

The three screamed for a half a second before a noticeable 'thunk' echoed from a tree just a few yards away.
Applejack bolted,kicking up grass as she ran; Jake rushed off as well, both of them trying to grasp just why the trio decided to zig zag through the farm like it was a stunt course. They didn't wonder for long, Jake rounded a tree to find Sweetie Belle in the middle of scolding her orange friend.

"I TOLD you that was a dumb idea!" Her voice cracking to a new high in octaves.
Applejack shook her head and sighed,trotting over to pick Applebloom out of the heap of what once was a wagon.

"You kids need to figure out how to get your cutie marks without tearing across the farm and hurting yourselves. Look what the scooter did..." She added remorsefully

Scootaloo shook the branches out of her man and picked her scooter up, looking out to see the trail of dirt and ripped grass that lead them to the sudden halt in their adventure. Gritting her teeth and head lowering in shame, she looked up at the two adults and worked up her best
"I'm sorry" eyes yet..

"I'm so sorry, Applejack! I didn't mean to tear up the dirt like that. We were trying to get our cutie marks in stunt racing!" The apology started well....but it ended as boasting like it normally does. Sweetie Belle rolled her eyes and Jake could only wish to do the same...

"Clear outta here you three! I gotta fix this mess you made!" Applejack shouted, causing the three to dash away.

A bit more direct that he expected from Applejack; he looked down at her with a confused look.

"A but excessive...?" She asked. Pausing in thought...she let out a sigh. "I'm just as worried as you are, sugercube, but I don't let get me down! Come on, the field is almost done, Big Mac can finish it up, you and I both need a breather." She ended with a smile.

Jake felt a little relief now that someone shared his sentiments. The mare started walking at a slow pace towards the road to Ponyville, talking as she walks.

"I think...and this is just my opinion, so don't take it as anything..."

Jake nodded...

"The princess has always been there to help us....but most of the time she lets us solve our own problems."
Jake looked at her even more confused.

"Just...try and not think about it for now." She ended, their walk becoming silent and painful. "And if she doesn't show after Winter Wrap-up, I will personally go to Canterlot with you and figure out what the hay was going on; sound like a plan, partner?"

Jake nodded, smile returning to his face and pace changing to a happy trot, contrast to the sluggish walk. Winter was only a few months away; he had a lot of work ahead storing food, which that itself was a strange concept...but not unexplainable. The ponies couldn't grow food in the cold, so it fell on Applejack and her family to prepare enough food to last the season, normally a task for humans; even then,Jake had no clue where the food even comes from, all he has ever seen is truck after truck bringing hay by the bale and the humans carrying plastic bags. Soon he began thinking of the little things he would pay attention to when he get back, trying to understand why humans do what they do...

"Jake?"

Jake blinked and shook his head.

"I'm here, I was listening." He said calmly to play his day dreaming off.

"I wasn't talking, sugercube..." Applejack retorted, a smirk rising when she feigned a sigh.

"Uhm....wel- Crap...I'm sorry, I'm getting distracted again." He said, head lowering and letting out a frustrated sigh.

"Then let's fix that! Today is all about you forgetting those troubles!" Applejack stated proudly, whipping around to jump in front of him. Jake could have sworn he could feel a song coming on...but this wasn't some kids show or anything...

"So...what are we gonna do...?" Jake asked when the silence grew thicker.

"Ciderfest!" Applejack yelled proudly, Jake jumping at the exclamation, and Applejack not missing a beat. "Every year we have a big celebration right before winter; lots of food, friends and our world famous Apple Farm Cider!"

Jake's deadpan look was almost funny when it stuck for more than a few seconds.

"What's cider...?" Jake finally asked.

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