Added the Dark tag to Across the Cosmic Ocean. Also Ch 3 Snippet · 12:58am May 9th, 2012
Well time to shoot myself in the foot again. =D.
I haven't done something this stupid since I changed the story name from Strange Love to the current and altered the cover image. =D
Just thought I'd tell you guys, you know, give you a warning so you can abandon ship early.
Over the weeks I've plotted out the story more and...dang...It got darker than I originally intended but that's just how I want to tell the story. It's still not going to be cupcakes level of gore. There actually wont be much gore since the villain doesn't cut things, she incinerates them. If anything there will be much more ashes of bodies than gore.
Also. By now your probably thinking "Whales, you asshole. Where's chapter 3? You dick." Or your not thinking that because you hated Ch2 like I do now and have lost complete hope in the story. (Self deprecation is FUN!)
Chapter 3 Will involve more development for Inferno Blaze, dig a lil deeper into her world and relations, more of the plot moving forward (barely any of that in Ch2, thus my current hatred of it), a post apocalyptic older Scootaloo living in Inferno's world (I have my reasons), and less comedy because I put way too much in Ch 2.
Well I haven't gotten it finished yet. When I do ( and once I get it proofread) I will post it.
Oh yeah I also FINALLY fixed most, hopefully all, the errors in Ch 2.
Now Here's proof of the need for the dark tag. Chapter 3 Snippet!!. It's still a work in progress.
In another world laid a grim landscape of grays and desaturated browns. As far as the eye could see, hills became nothing more than mounds of dried dirt and grass, oceans and lakes were dried and barren. Trees , what remained of the plant, were stumps placed in a land of charred remains. Where houses once stood, those that survived the intense solar flare brought down so long ago, now sat empty, as burned husks. Above the houses the sky burned with the fiery red rivaling the phoenix in color. Heavens above were bare as the planet they towered over. Clouds had long passed from existence. Even the atmosphere had been stripped away from the small insignificant dust ball of a planet.
Ash replaced the dirt of the ground. What exactly went into the ash, nopony, if anypony had been alive, would have been able to identify. Fur, wings, eyes, brains; such were only some of the gruesome ingredients that made up the ash. They were remnants of Inferno's old world, the GrimDark world as Tryant Celestia so cheerfully liked to call it.
Within this pitiful barren world resided the second most powerful of the Celestial Council, Inferno Blaze.
Hair tossing and tumbling in the dry void around her, the fiery matriarch pondered. Was everything she had done right? She was a symbol of justice living in a world of corruption and darkness. Burning the entire world, all its inhabitants -bar one orange pegasus filly-, it was the only solution. It just had to be....
Knowing she would gain no answers from the dust, Inferno focused on a skull at her hooves. Whoever the skull belonged to, Inferno didn't know. It didn't matter anyway. They had to have been corrupt, undeserving of life. Flames in the Sun Mistress's mane flickered as she bore her eyes down on the skull of the nameless pony she'd killed years ago with her flare.
A swift kick of her strong legs sent the skull whizzing through air. It clattered against a half melted, overturned garbage can before shattering into a thousand pieces, burnt dust that was once a brain pouring from the inside.
Inferno stood ankle deep in the ashes of the dead wasteland she called her home. A slow turn of the head moved her gaze across the remains of what was Sweet Apple Acres. Lush green fields had long faded into history, bleak grey ash sitting in their place. Any structures on the property showed their struggle against the flare, missing many sections if not half the entire building, the barn being the worst.
Just like the rest of her world, every color had been stripped from the barn a long time ago. Beams of sun pierced through the red sky into the structure. No roof was present to block out the rays, the entire top of the building was missing, burned away by Inferno's solar blaze. A few sun bleached skeletons of cows, chickens, and two ponies sat inside housing structure.
Inferno pushed her way through the dust, the ash audibly shifting in the wake of her super-heated shoes. Under her feet the ash melted into plates of black, white, and grey adorned with speckles. With a grumble she kicked the ash plates off her hooves, letting them shatter against the ground.
The barn's entrance had been blocked by fallen wood. It was rotten, burned, and just weak overall. Inferno made quick glance to the dirty wood. A few knocks rapped against the wood, leaving small indent in the soft planks. Another knock came as Inferno tapped her hoof against the wood.
"Hrrmm." She placed her super-heated shoe against the wood, momentarily searing the mark of her hoof into the plank. Instantly the entire wall was engulfed in a white light. Light beamed out of the shining white wall. A blast of heat flew from the shining light, further torching the ground around it.
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Ah, usually wouldn't do this, but I'm going to have to abandon ship. I can't really take dark fics, ever since I tried to read Sweet Apple Massacre... *shudders*
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I KNOW RIGHT
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Hang on! I'm comin' with ya! I want off this dang boat!
In seriousness though I can perfectly understand that. I have no intention of going near Sweet Apple Massacre or Cupcakes levels of darkness, but still I understand.
Now get off my ship....
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Envying derpy emote...
Envying...
Envying...
Envy Process complete.
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*walks to edge of plank, jumps up and down, and then dives into ocean* See you captain. I may see you on another ship later though.
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If the sea gods allow it... *dives off after you* HERE I COME SHARKIES!!
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You know, I think me and you may just get along. *hands you spare red and white, floaty thing you see on ships* Here you go.
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Hooray! *cheers as I float in a ocean filled with sharkies*
Huh. Well this sucks. Probably gonna be eaten. AH WELL!
... I didn't think of the sharks.
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GAH! I DON'T WANT TO BE EATEN! *tries to climb back on ship*
*ok, enough silliness. I need to worry if my new submission will be approved*
Why only leave Scootaloo alive? And was that Big Macintosh's skull?
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Okey dokey! Hope it gets through.
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I have my reasons.
Now that you mentioned it, it just may end up being his.
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*hugs Derpy*
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Same, it feels like my first submission all over again. I'm so nervous. *starts eating* I eat when I'm nervous. Good thing I don't gain weight easily.
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I get that feeling everytime I submit something. Then I feel glad it got submitted. BUT THEN! I get to worry about whether or not people will like it. THEN I get to feel bad when someone tells me I screwed up something obvious
JOY!
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AAAH! Angry Pinkie!
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Yeee! Fluttershy!
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Gimme a hug Flutters!
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Yes, well I'm going to go to bed and hopefully wake up to a message of an approved story.
Warning: Shameless Plug Ahoy!
Keep an eye out for my story The Lonely Wolf, a romance staring Fluttershy and my OC, Howl.
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106294 But leaving Scootaloo as the only surviving pony in Equestria is a new form of Scootabuse too horrible to ever try again.
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Oh I don't plan Scootabuse. Noooo I'm planning Inferno abuse =D. Scootaloo will tie into it
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I'll check it out.
106341 but the bone-crushing lonliness of being the last of your kind counts as a horrific form of abuse.
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Oh shes not totally alone.There's some diamond dogs that wear stolen oxygen tanks to keep alive, and a few surfaced Quarray eels to keep her company =D. Though they mostly A) hate her or B) want to eat her. She'd have Inferno too if she could find her.
But yes, yes it does count as a horrific form of abuse. I tend to do that to characters. Especially Villains, Sorry Inferno your in for the long haul. MWHAHAHAHA!
Hell ya, Chapter 3 preview.