How to get fired as an editor

My current editors are all lovely people, by the way, so don't worry about that. But I was looking through some older stuff and noticed this. There's a line in TPP that goes "Wet. It’s the first thing I can remember. "

While I was working on getting that first chapter out, I took a chance on some brony from the World of Tanks forums and asked him to look over it. It was my belief that any additional pair of eyes would help. So yeah, that wasn't the case. This was how he commented on that line.

When Pinkie first describes her feelings, I wouldn't use wet: I would use "the sensation of hot prickling needles coursing through my skin as I first took form". Being zapped into existence must feel like fire because there's massive amounts of energy flowing to create a being from nothing.

First of all, that's appallingly bad writing. Second, how the hell does he think he knows what being zapped into existence feels like?

And now I'm done taking out my frustration on the poor guy. By the way, there'll be another chapter of The Pinkie Paradox coming out within the next week.