A Passing Comet - Admiral Producer (Random Recommendations in <50 words #13) · 7:50am May 19th
Overall. Melancholic stargazing in Maretime bay with Izzy.
Best lines:
The Smallest Gesture[...]
“I know peachy and this certainly isn’t it.” the energetic unicorn remarked.
Sometimes, the grandest form of living was just being in the moment and doing what you could for your fellow ponies.
Why read? great melancholy; Izzy characterisation; atmospheric
Flaws. Sharper character for Comet; sharper senses/world; some writing issues.
Writing tip careful with ellipses, em dashes are <3 for informal writing (an em dash introduces a clause that explains or expands upon something that precedes it.)
It was all he wanted after all; to have another pony that would understand his feelings and what he was going through.
Meta: Skim-read? ✔ Full-read? TBC Recommend Author? TBC
Final thought.
You came like a comet
Blazing your trail.
Too high too far too soon.
You saw the whole of the moon.
"I know peachy and this certainly isn't it" is a fantastic line XD
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it is impossible to say without Izzy's voice in your head