To be honest, A lot of the comments had points in them. If I must be frank, it felt Horribly rushed. Pacing is something important to any story, but this is the most true to Romance. Having two characters almost instantly fall for each other after less than a page or two of interaction is a very big no-no in writing. Not to mention the protagonist was gaining skill at an almost alarming rate. He went from "Now being able to stay upright in the air" to "pulling off an electric thunderboom" in the course of about a minute. again, this goes along with pacing. I'm certain that it could be a wonderful story to tell, but it was the construction that killed it for me.

I removed it. I might try rewriting it, but I have something else planned.

What happened to your "Falling" story?