My only complaint is the fast pacing, and the fact that parts of the story seem almost like a monologue. And I'm pretty sure only arch-villains do that, unless Dashie is still possessed by that evil spirit and IS the arch villain!

Thank you for the comments Monocromatic Rainbow. I hope I can improve as the story moves on

I'm confused big time. It seems like there is a chunk of the story missing after she asks for the suit. Was she in a dream?

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The idea was that she was flitting back and forth between her dream state and reality very quickly durning the collapse of the prison, but I may not have made that clear enough. I apologize for the confusion, I'm still new at this and figuring out what works and what doesn't. Thanks for reading!