New Discoveries
written by Overmare
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This seemed a little rushed, like you wanted all the information and explainations to be piled in our heads as quickly as possible.
But it doesn't matter, it's still a goo twist
ok from chapter one my reactions were as follows
(chapter one) Ooh, this has potential
(chapter 2) ....ok......I'm seeing a lot of mistakes
, but maybe it'll improve!
(chapters 3-6)
There were quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but the writing style was fairly good, if a bit rushed. Please update, I'd like to see how all of this turns out.
269051 yes and no because that still is not the right amount to express it
269047 Good attitude. Don't be downed by a few grammar mistakes, they happen to all of us. Update soon, the content of the story is great.