I actually like this, the only thing i wast too fond of was that everything progressed a little too quickly, like you could have more. . . "fluff" if you will, in your story and make it an even more enjoyable experience to read. Above all else, just add more descriptive sentences to gove the story the justice it needs and deserves
So the ponies are anthros in this story? Cool. Always a fan of male human/female anthro pony romances. And this gets extra points if the romance is with Fluer, like the character tag implies.
I actually like this, the only thing i wast too fond of was that everything progressed a little too quickly, like you could have more. . . "fluff" if you will, in your story and make it an even more enjoyable experience to read. Above all else, just add more descriptive sentences to gove the story the justice it needs and deserves
1956785 Thank you for the advice good sir/Mam
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Have mercy...
1957108 HAHAHA WTF AHAHAH!
I would appreciate it if those who dislike could give me a piece of what they think would be better.
So the ponies are anthros in this story? Cool. Always a fan of male human/female anthro pony romances. And this gets extra points if the romance is with Fluer, like the character tag implies.
what? damn it! this is an anthro story?! shit! i thought it was only going to be the main character who was anthro! damn it i hate anthro stories!
but i will give it a shot i'm not that ignorant to think all anthro stories are bad. and the first chapter was pretty decent.
it's that epic