Awakening
Chapter 2. Awakening.
Twilight awoke screaming in her bed. A violent ringing sound beside her bed startling her, as she used her magic to grab hold of the unknown source of the sound; throwing it against the wall of her room as hard as she could. Shattering the object into twenty different pieces like grenade shrapnel in a war zone.
"Twilight?! Are you okay?!"
Twilight looked toward the voice speaking to her. Just off to the right of Twilight's bed was Spike. The purple dragon was sitting up in his small cozy bed looking at Twilight. A look of worry upon his face. Twilight stared blankly at the dragon for several seconds before realizing he had asked her a question. "W-what Spike?", she managed to stutter out. Her mind still settling from the fierce amount of adrenalin pumping through her body.
"Are you okay?", the dragon repeated.
Twilight tilted her head to the side. Smiling as she did so. "Of course I'm okay Spike. Why do you ask?",she dumbly replied. Twilight knew very well that she wasn't 'okay'. But seeing the look of worry on Spike's face made her want to comfort the dragons worries as quickly as she could.
"I ask because every other pony I know start their day off with a glass of orange juice and scrambled eggs. Not a glass of sweat and scrambled clock." Spike replied sarcastically, pointing his scaly hand to the giant dent in the wall where Twilight's alarm clock had hit it.
Twilight took a moment to observe the surroundings of her bedroom. Her bed and fur were indeed drenched in sweat. Her breathing was labored and her mouth felt as dry as the hottest day of summer in the Applepalooza desert. Twilight looked toward the dent in the wall she had made when she attempted to send her alarm clock into orbit. The wallpaper that was caught within the impact zone was half torn and falling of the wall. All around her bed, Twilight could see bits and pieces of metal from the object that once resembled a clock.
Twilight looked back to Spike, the look of worry still apparent on his face, "Sorry.", twilight said blushing, "Bad dream."
"Bad dream? The way you reacted it looked more like a nightmare", Spike retorted.
At hearing that, Twilight thought back to the dream she had been having before waking up. The memories of the darkness, and the tendrils returning to her thoughts. She shivered slightly as she slowly made her way off her bed and onto her own four hooves. "It's nothing Spike. Really, just a bad dream. I'll be fine", she said as she walked toward the baby dragon. Throwing her hooves around him in a hug as she did so. "I appreciate your concern for me though."
Spike smiled and hugged Twilight back. Somehow he always felt safe when Twilight hugged him. Even if her lavender fur was wet with sweat.. Maybe this is how it felt to be hugged by ones mother. As far as Spike was concerned, Twilight was very much like a mother to him. She was the one who hatched him from his egg. Even taught him how to speak and walk. Without Twilight, he wouldn't have had the life he did now.
Twilight released Spike from the hug before straitening her mane, and clearing her throat. "Now then," she said with a dignified composure that most ponies only saw from a school teacher, "What's on our schedule for today?
Spike reached under the cushion of his small bed, pulling out a piece of paper listed with the dates and times of the weeks planned activities. "Well lets see. Looks like the only thing today is your spa date with Rarity.", spikes body perked up slightly as he read the name of his supposedly secret crush. 'Supposedly secret', because just about everypony knew about it. Only reason it was still considered a secret was because Spike had never actually spoken his true feelings to the white mare of his dreams. "Other than that, guess I'll just clean up this mess",Spike said, gesturing towards the metal clock bits still scattered around the floor.
"I could help if you'd like. After all it was me who made the mess." said Twilight.
"No Twilight its fine", Spike assured her. "I was just going to clean the library today anyway. And I'll probably be done before mid-day anyway"
Twilight still felt guilty for Spike's offering to clean her mess.But Spike insisted. And when Spike said he would do something, he meant it. Twilight couldn't help but feel a little proud of Spike. Keeping to ones word was something she felt that Spike had learned from herself. There was rarely a time in her life when twilight had said she would do something and not follow through with it.
:"Well okay.", Twilight said. "As long as it isn't an extra burden to you."
"It's fine Twilight.", Spike smiled, "Go enjoy your spa-date with Rarity."
"I will," she said as she descended the stairs to the library's first floor. "Thanks."
"Oh, and Twilight!" Spike shouted from the second floor as Twilight reached for the front door.
"Yes?" she replied.
"Take a bath while you're there at the spa. You stink with all that sweat.." Spike said with a mischievous grin.
Twilight playfully stuck her tongue out at him as she left the library. Closing the door behind her.
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As Twilight headed out for the Ponyville spa to meet Rarity, she couldn't help but think about the dream she had last night. Truth was, that wasn't the first nightmare she had experienced that month. Ever since she and her friends had departed from the Crystal Empire and arrived back home, Twilight had had nothing but bad dreams. Last nights dream was far worse though. She didn't want to tell Spike about the nightmares. That would only cause him to worry about her. But Twilight wasn't above seeking help though. That was the real reason she was going to meet with Rarity. Of all Twilight's friends, Rarity would probably be the most logical.
Twilight had already imagined how each of her friends would react. Fluttershy would be cowing in a corner as Twilight tried to explain what happened in her nightmares. Pinkie would try to throw some kind of 'Get out of Twilight's dreams' party. Rainbow Dash would tell her to beat the hay out of the things in her nightmares.And though Applejack would also be good pony to talk to, she was busy with harvest since Big Macintosh hurt his leg last week. Twilight didn't ant to disturb her. So Rarity became the one she would confide in.
Continuing toward the spa Twilight rounded a corner when she heard a pair of familiar voices in front of her.
"Come on Scootaloo! You promised!"
"For the last time Sweetie Belle no! I just got this knew scooter and i don't need you breaking it!"
It was Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo. The two of them were arguing with each other. Each one had a hoof on a brand new scooter that appeared to belong to Scootaloo. Twilight didn't want to be late to the spa, but being one of the elements of harmony wouldn't allow her to turn a blind eye to the clear disharmony happening here. Her kind nature wouldn't allow it either.
"Um...girls? Something wrong?" Twilight asked. She wanted to get this dispute among friends to end as quickly as possible.
"Twilight!", the younger unicorn said, "Twilight you gotta help me! Make Scootaloo share!"
"Why should I?",the orange pegasus replied.
"Because you promised to give me a turn yesterday before you broke your old scooter!"
Twilight looked over the situation with her mind.Then she looked at Scootaloo. "Did you promise to give Sweetie Belle a turn yesterday Scootaloo?", she questioned.
"Well...yeah but-" she attempted to say before Twilight interrupted her.
"Scootaloo. What kind of place would Equestria be if nopony keep their word? What if Princess Celestia refused to hand control of the moon back over to Princess Luna? We'd be in the middle of a civil war right now, and you wouldn't even have a scooter.", she calmly explained.
"I...I guess you're right." Scootaloo finally admitted. "I'm sorry Sweetiebell. Here.", Scootaloo handed the scooter over to Sweetiebell.
"All right! I'm gonna tear this town of the map!" Sweetiebell declared as she hopped onto the scooter. She pushed off with one of her hind legs as she moved forward smiling......... At least until the scooter was suddenly stopped by the wheel hitting a small rock on the ground. Sweetie Belle fell forward. Smacking her face hard against the ground.
"Sweetie Belle! Are you alright!?" both Twilight and Sweetiebell shouted in unison. They hurried over to the fallen Sweetie Belle.
Sweetie Belle sat up rubbing her sore brow with her hoof. "On second thought, I think I'll leave the scootering to Scootaloo.", she said blushing. The three ponies all burst out laughing.
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Rarity had been waiting out side the Ponyville spa for nearly ten minutes. It was so unlike Twilight to be late, and even more unlike her to break her word to a friend. Just as Rarity began to think she came on the wrong day, Twilight rounded the corner. Rarity waved her hoof at her as Twilight approached.
"Sorry I'm late Rarity. I had to sort out some friendship problems on my way here.", Twilight said apologetically.
"Well I certainly hope they weren't problems with our friendship darling", Rarity said as she put on an overly dramatic face,"Why. Imagine the horrors i would've faced if my dear friend Twilight Sparkle stood me up! Oh the inhumanity!" Both Twilight and Rarity laughed as they entered the spa together.
Luckily for Twilight and Rarity, Aloe and Lotus, the twins who ran the spa, had no other appointments made for that morning. So getting in late wasn't a problem. The spa ponies led them to a room with two cushioned lounge chairs for Twilight and Rarity to relax on while they waited. Once Twilight was settled in her chair, she explained to Rarity why she had asked her to meet with her today.
"Nightmares?", Rarity said as Twilight finished her story, "How long did you say you've been having them?"
"About a month.", Twilight said regretfully. "Ever since we got back from the Crystal Empire."
"That's a long time to be having nightmares and not tell anypony Twilight. I don't know how I could ever function without my full eight hours of beauty sleep" Rarity said as she flipped back her styled mane in an overly exaggerated motion.
Twilight playfully rolled her eyes, smiling as she continued. "I can sleep through a few nightmares just fine. That's not really the problem. Or... at least it wasn't until last night..."
"What do you mean?" Rarity asked her. "What happened last night?"
Twilight told Rarity the whole story of what she had experienced the night before. From the darkness and the voice. To the tendril emitting light and the green and red eyes. The more twilight spoke about the eyes, the more she began to realize just whose eyes they were. Twilight knew of only one pony with eyes like that. The eyes of-...
"King Sombra's eyes?" Rarity said bluntly, even before Twilight herself had the answer in her mind.
Twilight looked at her friend with a look of pure surprise on her face. "How did you know?", she asked.
"Well as far as I'm aware, only one pony had eyes matching the ones you just described. Besides, we all saw them Twilight. Felt them. I doubt anypony could forget seeing eyes like that." Rarity pictured the King Sombra in her head. The terrifying eyes staring back at her, "Anypony not afraid of those eyes, is either a complete foal, or Rainbow Dash."
It was true. Every word Rarity said was true. Twilight remembered when she first saw Sombra's eyes. She and her friends were running from a cloud of dark magic in a snow filled wasteland, trying to reach the safety of the Crystal Empire behind Princess Cadance's shield. As they ran the cloud came closer and closer. It was then Twilight turned around, and saw them for the first time.
Towering over her was a giant pair of eyes. Where there should have been white, was a neon green color. The eyes irises were colored a bright red.And each eye held a slit pupil instead of a normal rounded one. Twilight had never felt more terrified, than the moment she saw those unnatural eyes. Even discords misshapen yellow eyes seemed normal when compared to Sombra's. The eyes also had something even more strange about them. Emitting from the sides of each eye was a purple wisp of dark magic. To see such a being with dark magic quite literally pouring from its eyes, Twilight was scared. No. She was terrified. If her brother Shinning Armor hadn't stayed behind to stall the clouds progress, Twilight was sure it would have captured and consumed her.
"Alright! Time for your treatment!"
Aloe and Lotus had been preparing while Twilight and Rarity talked. Twilight didn't mind that the twins had heard every word they said. Of all the ponies in Ponyville, Aloe and Lotus were the most trustworthy. Everyday they would hear their customers talking about their private lives as if the twins weren't even there. They were good at their job, but even better at keeping confidentiality. If there was an element of harmony on Secret keeping, Twilight was sure these two would share it.
In front of Twilight and Rarity were two tables. Each one had around thirty strips of some kind of green plant laid out on them. Rarity saw the look of confusion on her friends face and obliged her curiosity. "Seaweed wraps dear.", she said. "They'll work wonders on your coat and mane."
"Have you done this before?", Twilight asked, still unsure of the odd smelling plants in front of her.
"But of course!. How else do you think i keep myself looking so glossy and chic", Rarity exclaimed while rubbing a hoof through her fur coat.
Twilight laid back in her chair as she closed her eyes to relax.
Aloe slowly began applying the seaweed to Twilight's body. Starting at Twilight's hind hooves and working the wrappings up toward her mid-section as her sister Lotus did the same to Rarity. Twilight shifted her weight several times. She felt rather uncomfortable, but she just blew off the feeling as this being a new experience to her. Little did she fully realize that this feeling was all too familiar to her. As Aloe continued to apply the wrappings, she began tightening them around Twilight's body to ensure that the seaweed dug deep enough through Twilight's fur to feel its full effect.
By the time Twilight's chest was covered in the watery plants her breaths had become shallow, and her heart beat began beating violently in her chest. Twilight felt breathless. She couldn't breath correctly. As Aloe started to cover Twilight's neck with the seaweed, Twilight quietly asked the pink twin to stop. Aloe didn't hear her and still continued to apply the seaweed to Twilight's neck. "P-please stop", Twilight said a little louder. But Aloe was lost in her work. Unable to hear her customer weakly gasp for air as she continued to apply and tighten the seaweed to her body.
Twilight closed her eyes for a few seconds, but when she opened them again, she saw a sight far diffident than the one she remembered before closing her eyes. Twilight was back in the darkness, The tendrils creeping across her body as she felt herself struggle to breath. Twilight's body began writhing in the oily substance squeezing her. Her panicked mind unable to say anything as the tendrils continued to cling and tighten against her form. Twilight closed her eyes again, and as she opened them she saw them. The Green eyes. Blazing in front of her with their frightening appearance. The purple wisps emitting from them began to envelope her restrained body. Twilight's heart continued to pound against her chest. She had to escape. She had get away. If she didn't, Twilight knew it would mean her end. Using all of her remaining strength, Twilight took a deep breath. Focusing her magic for a spell to free her from the binds that held her. As Twilight released the spell, she Screamed at the top of her lungs.
"GET AWAY!"
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After cleaning up the destroyed clock, Spike started working on cleaning the rest of the library he called home. Dusting shelves. Re-shelving books. Polishing the wooden floors. The works. Unlike most dragons, Spike enjoyed having a clean living space. Something he had probably inherited from living his entire life among ponies. While twilight was obsessive with her studies. Spike was obsessed with keeping Twilight's work area clean and tidy. It was the least he cold offer her, having given him life and all.
There was only one more thing left for Spike to clean. And although it wasn't necessary, he still felt compelled to make sure all parts of the library were as tidy as he could make them. Moving over to one of the bookshelves, Spike began shifting some books around until he had made a large enough opening to reach for what he was after.
Hidden behind the books on the back of the shelf was a horse shoe shaped symbol. Spike pressed on the symbol. Causing it to recede into the wall before it revealed a secret compartment. The first time Spike had found this was when Pinkie Pie had decided to try a little cloning experiment that had gotten way out of hoof. The book that the compartment once held was now a part of Twilight's personal collection of books. What the compartment now held was something far more dangerous.
Inside the hidden area sat a large glass dome. And inside the dome lay a device that had almost caused the very destruction of Ponyville. The object contained by the glass dome was small, but none the less, powerful. A large portion of the item dawned a large crimson diamond cut crystal. Atop it sat the sculpted image of a unicorn's head, surrounded by a pair of crimson accented wings. The artifact was none other than the alicorn amulet.
Spike hated having such a dangerous thing no more than 15 feet away from his own bed, but Twilight had insisted that it be kept where she could keep a close eye on it. Though the amulet was proven to grant any unicorn great power beyond their years, it also would slowly begin to corrupt the user. Driving them insane to the point of not trusting wheels like it had done to Trixie. The pony who brought it to Ponyville in the first place in an attempt to get revenge on Twilight for upstaging her. To make things worse, it could only be removed by the its wearer.
Before closing the compartment, Spike ran a small feather duster through it. Clearing away the old cobwebs that still lingered from the first time he had opened it. "At least Twilight would never do something as crazy as using the amulet." Spike thought to himself.
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"Twilight? Twilight are you alright?"
Aloe had stopped applying the seaweed to Twilight's body when she noticed the lavender unicorn gasping for air. She looked on in horror as the gasping unicorn began shaking violently within the seaweed she was wrapped in. But just as Aloe thought she should call a doctor, Twilight stopped shaking.
By this time, Rarity had freed herself from the seaweed by carefully cutting it with a pair of scissors she had levitated over to herself. Rarity, Aloe, and Lotus stood over Twilight's unconscious form. Unsure of what to do. Twilight was still breathing, but her breaths sounded shallow and labored. Rarity began to pull on the seaweed, trying to free her friend. But before she could make much progress, Twilight's eyes shot open.
Twilight's eyes Were Glowing a Bright lavender color, as she took a large breath before screaming.
"GET AWAY!"
The three standing over Twilight were thrown across the room with a concussive force that would've rivaled that of the royal Canterlot voice. Rarity looked on with horror as she saw blades of purple magic shred the seaweed around Twilight into a thousand pieces. No. Not shredded. Rarity looked harder. The seaweed wasn't just cut, it was disintegrating until it no longer ceased to exist. With the binds gone Twilight began levitating upward. Her head was mere inches from the ceiling, when Twilight's horn began to glow a dark lavender. With an ear piercing scream, Twilight's horn shot out a ray of energy above her. Creating a hole nearly five feet wide in diameter through the roof of the spa.
Her magic spent. Twilight's limp form fell. She hit the ground with a deep thud, as she drifted back into unconsciousness.
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"I ask because every other pony I know start their day off with a glass of orange juice and scrambled eggs. Not a glass of sweat and scrambled clock."
...That is gold.
You did good, I enjoyed this chapter as well. Keep it up
Issues, since you asked:
Nothing serious, just some consistency errors for the most part.
-Sweetie Belle is her name. (You use Sweetiebell once or twice.)
-Names deserve a capital, as they are nouns (person, place or thing)
-Knew, and new are different things. (early on you used knew, rather then new)
-Using multiple exclamation marks, don't do that. Use one.
-When someone speaks, start a new paragraph.
-Indent each paragraph.
-Each paragraph should be, ideally, three lines at least, for dialogue this changes of course, but keep it in mind never the less.
Thats all I can think of at any rate.
1774850 Sweetie Belle? *curses to self violently for making such a stupid mistake.*
1774850 okay. fixed Sweetie Belle.
Why are there so many deleted comments?
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I really miss that show.
1784340 you can see those? i just deleted them to tidy the space. they were all about grammar mistakes that i took care of
It's a good start. There are still a bit of grammar and spelling errors throughout but getting a proofreader could help with those. My only real problem is that you could use compound sentences instead of so many little sentences. It'll help the story flow better for the reader and fix the fragments that you have floating around like "It's nothing Spike. Really, just a bad dream. I'll be fine", she said as she walked toward the baby dragon. Throwing her hooves around him in a hug as she did so. The bold should be a single statement, not two sentences. Though overall it's good and I'm interested in where the story is gonna go, since you have a whole trilogy planned out already.
Cheers 
1808423 one of these days ill actually get around to proofreading these things, and i dont like other people proof reading for me. so yeah. ((that is weird how i wrote that line))
Chapter 3 is up!
I think you meant Scootaloo.
I not i.