Prologue
Octi surprised me with something I didn't begin to think she had the 'poise' or 'grace' to think about doing. "Vinyl? We do anything last night?" The same question as ever by the 'high class' Octavia. I licked my lips as usual, reached for my glasses for dramatic effect and blurted, "Other than filly-fooling? S'pose not."...
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The correct grammar is "Did we do anything last night" not "We do anything last night". This is a good hook for chapters to come, but Octavia is high class and would not speak the way you have presented her. Other than that, as I said, this is a good hook.
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