Mating season is in full-swing and Spitfire is feeling love for the very first time - all centered around the Wonderbolts' newest recruit, Rainbow Dash. But love never went smoothly. Sequel to "Over The Rainbow."
So tell me: these feels, what caused them? Was it their little conversation at night? Rainbow's insecurity? Or Spitfire's deep-rooted desire for the tomcolt?
2707109 Actually, it was consensual. They were BOTH horny for each other.
I personally liked the part where Spitfire, disturbed by unpleasant dreams, gets up at night to check in on Rainbow Dash, doing her best to comfort and reassure her. Poor Dashie... Those ancient, baby-make urge-haves are just too much for her virgin mind and body... What did you think?
2719909 I really like the emotional bonding we see between Rd and Spit, it makes for a very cute and enjoyable reading experience. I thought the whole party sex scene however was over the top, it felt INCREDIBLY out of character for Twi and well... every-pony, was sudden and plain weird on what was just a second ago a great moment for Rd.
Thats just my opinion though, I get the comic effect it was supposed have but something a bit less... major would imho have been more fitting , overall though A lovely read that scene was really the only one that really got on my nerves, keep up the good work
thanks for getting this uploaded, i barely finished the rest yesterday! love it good job!
Oh god, this is hilarious. This takes the cake (Drumbeat) for funniest non crack fix ever.... And yes, I'm waiting for the... Provocativeness.
2701692 Really? You mean it? Why, thank you!
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No problem. There will never be a clopfic I take seriously. But this is truly amazing. Deep dark emotions with comedy, lovely combo.
YAY! New chapter!
You are a pretty good writer, you know that?
Here's that picture I sent you before, should work now:
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The feels
2703693 Awww, thank you! Heh...^^
So tell me: these feels, what caused them? Was it their little conversation at night? Rainbow's insecurity? Or Spitfire's deep-rooted desire for the tomcolt?
2702726 That means SO much to me! Thank you! Please, PLEASE tell me all about what you liked and loved about it. I'm always looking for feedback...
2701692 Personally, my favorite part is Soarin' yelling "Don't light a match!" before letting out a bass-heavy belch.
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I have to say my favorite part is when Twilight yells BANZAI! and just starts raping Doctor Whooves.
I am getting as exited for sex as everypony in the story here, stop the major tease *Grin* No but seriously, good story so far, I like it
2707109 Actually, it was consensual. They were BOTH horny for each other.
I personally liked the part where Spitfire, disturbed by unpleasant dreams, gets up at night to check in on Rainbow Dash, doing her best to comfort and reassure her. Poor Dashie... Those ancient, baby-make urge-haves are just too much for her virgin mind and body... What did you think?
2717766 Any favorite parts?
2719909 I really like the emotional bonding we see between Rd and Spit, it makes for a very cute and enjoyable reading experience. I thought the whole party sex scene however was over the top, it felt INCREDIBLY out of character for Twi and well... every-pony, was sudden and plain weird on what was just a second ago a great moment for Rd.
Thats just my opinion though, I get the comic effect it was supposed have but something a bit less... major would imho have been more fitting , overall though A lovely read that scene was really the only one that really got on my nerves, keep up the good work
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I think everybody will need ear plugs when she gives herself to Spitfire.
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i'm pretty sure that it would wake Celestia out of a deep sleep.