To my readers, I know the first attempt of chapter 3 was pretty bad and yeah, it was done in a rather lazy way. I hope that this re-write of chapter 3 makes up for the previous one. Again, thank you for your patience and understanding. So here is the re-vamp of Chapter 3.
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Chapter 3 : Sweet and Elite - Part 2
Spike yawned as he stretched out on the bed. He looked around, wondering where he was. It was dark out, the room seemed huge and the bed, softer than he remembered. He sat up, and as he looked around, he felt disorientated. Trying to figure out the situation, his gaze fell upon the silhouette of a beautiful dark blue Alicorn, sitting on the bed, no more than three feet away from him. He realized where he was.
“Evening Spike. Did you sleep well?” Luna asked.
Spike simply blinked. He never realized how beautiful Luna really was. Her dark mane flowing, glittering like a thousand diamonds, the soft facial features, her trim petite body.
“Spike? Are you alright?” Luna asked again, a little concerned.
Snapping out of it, Spike quickly shook his head from side to side. “Yes Princ.. I mean, yes Luna, I’m fine. Just, not used to waking up at night.” He yawned, rubbing his eyes with his fist.
Luna smiled sweetly, happy to have a friend with her. “I hope you are hungry Spike. I had the servant pony bring this up for you.” She said as she levitated up a large silver tray, laden with fresh cut fruits, and gemstones and placed it on the bed between them.
Spike’s eyes lit up when he saw the platter before him. His eyes sparkled with appreciation, his mouth drooled with anticipation. As he reached out for a sapphire, he suddenly stopped. Looking at Luna, he asked, “Is it really alright to eat on your bed Luna? Twilight never lets me eat in bed.”
Luna giggled at the innocence of the question. “It’s quite alright Spike. And after all, I am a Princess. A little thing like eating in bed isn’t going to cause any trouble.” She said as she took a dainty bite out of a slice of apple. Spike smiled as he picked up the sapphire and took a big bit out of it, spilling a few shards on the silk sheets.
Spike sat there happily munching and chewing through the pile of gems. Sapphires, rubies and emeralds. One after another, the little dragon devoured the gems in front of him. All the while, Luna watched him eat as she quietly nibbled the various fruits.
Finished, Spike leaned back against a large pillow, patting his overstuffed belly. He put a claw over his mouth as s slight burp escaped his lips. “Oops, excuse me.” He said and grinned.
“What an appetite you have Spike.” Luna said.” Now let’s go take a walk in the garden.” She said as she got off her bed.
“I’d love to, but what about your duties Luna?” Spike asked.
Luna smiled as she turned to face Spike. “Oh the important task has already been taken care of. After all, it’s two in the morning. I’ve already had a few hours to take care of my main duties. Everything else on today’s agenda has been moved to another time. Now come, let us go.” She said as she made her way towards the door. “Oh, and I had this bought up for you,” she said as she levitated over a coat and a soft thick matching scarf. “The night can get quite chilly for somepony who isn’t used to it.”
“Thank you Luna.” Spike said as he slipped on the coat and scarf and followed behind her.
They walked out to the garden. The night was very quiet and not a sound could be heard. So quiet it was that they could hear the grass as it crunched softly underhoof. It was a very cool night and Spike was glad that he had the coat on. Still, it was rather chilly and the little dragon pulled the coat a little tighter around himself. They made their way to the centre of the garden where Luna had already had two lounge chairs ready. Luna climbed onto one and lay down comfortably, crossing her forelegs in front of her.
“Come sit next to me Spike.” Luna said as she patted the second chair. Spike climbed up onto the second chair and leaned back.
For a moment, they both looked at the night sky, simply watching the stars scattered across the night sky, twinkling as they seem to dance in place. Only a crescent moon was visible making the sky seem empty. Yet the night was indeed lovely and Spike sighed softly as he gazed upon the night’s beauty.
Her ears flicked up at the sigh as it escaped his lips. “What are you thinking Spike?” Luna asked.
“Oh, just how much I love how beautiful the night sky is tonight.” Spike answered, his gaze still locked at the twinkling stars above them.
Luna smiled as happiness and appreciation flowed through her. Besides her sister, Princess Celestia, nopony had ever told her how beautiful they thought her night was. It felt good to be appreciated. “Thank you Spike. It’s lovely to hear you say that.” She said softly, looking down as she rubbed her hooves together, a tear rolled down her cheek.
Spike turned to look at Luna as she spoke. In her sweet smile Spike noticed a hint of satisfaction. Like something had finally gone right and she was pleased that it had happened. Then he noticed the wet trail across her cheek. Unsure what her feelings were, he asked her, “Luna, why are you crying? Are you sad?”
“I’m not feeling sad Spike.” She said, turning to look at the baby dragon. “I’m happy. Happy to have my night loved and appreciated. And I’m also happy to have a friend to share my night with. Thank you.” Luna smiled, tears beginning to well up.
Spike got off the chair and moved close to Luna where he boldly reached out with his left claw and gently held her chin. Using his scarf, he carefully wiped away the tears from Luna’s beautiful cyan coloured eyes. She had felt his touch like this once before, back during the Nightmare Night celebration. She was crying, and Spike held her chin in his claws just like tonight, and whispered, “I’m not afraid of you Princess. And I am, and always be, your friend.”
She opened her eyes to see the sweet dragon looking back at her, with that lovable silly grin he always seem to have on his face. Luna smiled back, a comfortable silence between them.
Suddenly, the wind picked up, blowing slightly harder than before. The chilling wind blew past the two friends in the garden. Spike who was not used to the cold night air tried in vain to fight against the bitter cold. Luna saw her little friend struggle and quickly pulled him onto her chair and pressed him against her chest. Her wings unfolding and rested in front of her and Spike, creating a perpetual wind barrier of feathers.
Soon, the winds died down, and so did the biting cold. Spike stopped shivering and opened his eyes. He was feeling warm, a soft blanket of feathers around him. It was then he looked up to see Luna looking down at him with her bright cyan eyes. All Spike could do was stare. He could not believe he was in lying between her forehooves, so close to her chest and with her wings around him. He started to stutter, unsure what to say when Luna spoke.
“Shhh… its alright Spike. You can stay warm with me.” As she hugged him.
Stunned as he was at the Princess’ action, all Spike could do was smile as a contented sigh once again escaped his lips.
To be continued.
So u want me to go and change the italics from the previous chapter(s)? Sorry, too lazy to do that. The fact that I already stopped using italics is good enough for me.
And yes, I was already told about the shifting tenses....There is no need to repeat. If you read it in the lastest chapter, then I apologize....
It's sweet, for sure. But i think, the last paragraph was unnecessary. Anyway, i wish you good luck with a new chapter. Thx for the story
Hey thanks for the vote of confidence. Tho yeah, you're probably right... the last bit kinda killed the class there eh?
Hmm, that last part. Is this going to turn into a clop fic? If so, I'm all for it.
Even though the chapter was good. It had a good narration and stuff. But it just felt like ... a filler to the story. Hollow even.
1694653 Yep, the lastest chapter is gooder than the last one. In fact, it's probably the bestest chapter. I wondered if you were really that lazy, but then I realized that you just weren't very smart. Of course, when you replied to my comment with insults, and, due to your inability to use the reply button, I never read it, I put together a sandwich and watch episodes of Justice League.
kingtiger666
If you thought that my earlier comment was an insult, then I apologize for it was not meant as an insult, just how I feel about it. And if the 'gooder', and 'bestest chapter' crack was an insult as well, then I have to say it was a cheap one. Also, if you believe that I am not a smart person, then well, so be it. After all, that's just your opinion. The reply button? Yeah, I don't know how to use it. It just comes out numbers. I guess its the post number. But like I said, I'll live. And if you judge the contents of the story from my latest comment on your comment, as well as the fact that I do not know how to use the reply button, well, its your loss really. Oh and lastly, I was watching Iron Man - Armored Adventures myself earlier.
Rennes le chateau
Yeah, I know and I promise to better the next chapter.
The Dragon Warlock
Nah... dont think I wanna turn it into a clopfic.
MORE!!!!! AND I REALLY LIKE IT))))
AND THE END IS GOOD)))
Well, truth be told, I don't think I like the third chapter. It was lazily done. So I'm currently re-writing the whole thing (just the 3rd chapter).
Thanks all for the comments as well as the criticism. Oh and the insults as well, (if there was any). It all helps.
You probably don't care, but when you hit the reply button it puts those numbers in on purpose. After you post the reply the numbers turn into their name and in turn they receive a notification, which makes everything easier
1700221
Not to be rude alright, but yeah, it didn't bother me at all, tho I agree that you are right, that it makes it easier for others.
So I'll try it with this post now.
Firstly, I didnt realize that the reply button was that simple. Guess I over thought the whole thing. Thanks For The Plot for clearing that up for me.
As for the story, its been edited so its not as lame as it was before. yeah, even I called it lame... well, live and learn. I hope you all feel that its better now.
Thanks guys.
1700743 Yay i'm helpful
MOAR!!!! FOR THE LOVE OF GOD PLEASE MOAR!!!!!!
So are spike and Luna like already in a dating type of relationship or are they just really good friends I'm a bit confused