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Am I missing something? Aren't Twilight and the girls the only ones who saw him and know about him? How does that equal pony-kind as a whole? Since he is still largely unknown there should still be hope for Celestia's plan. Just let Twilight and the others in on it and continue as before. Capturing him is really unnecessary when you think about it, but ok whatever.
The reason for attacking the Dragon is strange. For example you could change it to something more understandable.
He goes to investigate the smoke and encounters the Dragon sleeping and tries to sneakily steal gold and jewels because he read in a book about enchanting material and reagents. The dragon wakes up because they have a 6th sense for when someone is stealing their treasure or something and they fight.
The treasure can be used to cast more advanced magic that needs higher control easier, for example transmuting stuff into clothes that he needs, or using that to practice enchanting for equipment that can help him channel magic easier etc.
The last part where he kills the dragon is strange too. Having a cold, pragmatic and calculating MC is not bad, but he seems more crazy than anything.
You can make him kill the Dragon because magical creatures are nice reagents, catalysts or enchanting material, and the dragon is on the top of the list of most useful magical creatures.
It is very important to make the MCs reason understandable and logical so that the reader can understand them.
Greed and ambition is something that all humans understand so it's easy to explain that way his actions.
walks up to an adult dragon, stare it for a while and deliver the most thoughtful, immaculate and award-winning speech ever: "Get up, reptillian"