I'm liking this story. Just try to not make Gleaming too dense, She was taken to a vet and now finds herself on a farm or more likely an animal shelter. Realistically, it shouldn't take her much longer to figure it out. Plus she can clearly see there is no food in the barn and there is a doggie door right there, and she clearly saw the ponies grazing on "fresh" grass outside. I'm kind of wondering who has the lower I.Q. The ponies in the barn, or Gleaming. š
All kidding aside, I'm very much looking forward to reading more.
Monk "not only was love blind but it must have some severe mental disorders too." -Recteik Shade
11656130 Hi there! Glad to see you like my story! And do not worry I have some sort of revealment (is that even the right term?) moment for her planned in the following chapter. It will also explain some of the mannerisms and principles the ponies in my world operate on.
On the topic of Gleaming being too dense, it may not have come out right, but she only knows ponies as smart and sentient beings. She has been used to this all throughout her life, and it is kinda hard for people and ponies alike to let go of old habits and thing we are used to. It makes us feel comfortable. It makes us feel safe. Just imagine walking out your door one morning and have your neighbor (literally) bark at you! Also there is the possibilitiy that they are simply under a wide range spell making them dumber than they should be. In a world where magic is a thing, one has to always be cautious of mind magic and mental manipulations, e.g. Sombra. (hint: there is a changeling among us!)
Rest assured though, Gleaming will realize her mistake in judgement quite soon and leave her security shell. A big part of it will be through the character I introduced at the chapters end.
Your stories too good. Is it based on any cross overs? Should I recignise the universe or is it of your creation?
Monk "It turns out that prostitution was viewed as an honest profession. However, how ponies figured out this was their special talent when most ponies got their cutie marks in grade school was suspiciously glossed over whenever the subject came up." -Typist Gray
To answer your question, the universe is largely my own creation, even though I borrowed some elements here and there from very different franchises, such as where technology is concerned. Which ones, I will explain instory whenever they do pop up, sometimes through Gleamings perspective, sometimes through a convenient plot device. As for the sourcematerial of my idea, I suggest you give MadMaxtheBlack a visit. Its a human in Equestria fiction (with humans as pets to ponies), which I really liked and got me thinking if anyone has ever tried to reverse the situation. Sure there are many stories about ponies visiting earth, but those have never had to deal with non smart ones before or being stuck amongst them. At least to my humble knowledge. (IĀ“ve read my fair share of stories here and will continue to do so, but i canĀ“t rule out that someone else had the same plot idea.)
At some point in the past I got the image of a pony sitting in my room, smiling up at me with those big puffy eyes and its tongue poking out, stuck in my head. And over the next few weeks my mind had build an entire and by far and large plausible world around them. I even have ideas how they are connected to Equestria proper.
And lastly i went for Gleaming because she does not seem to get much love from my perspective...and there are lots of funny situations i can get her into due to her choice in a military career, now and later on.
11661089 The one i read way back was the original, centered around a human called Max and Twilight after she had just gotten her wings. Celestia had bought him as a gift to help her settle in with her new responsibilities.
But no, I have not read the one you pointed out yet. Looks promising though. Seems like you devil may have just found whats gonna eat my sparetime for a while :D
I'm liking this story. Just try to not make Gleaming too dense, She was taken to a vet and now finds herself on a farm or more likely an animal shelter. Realistically, it shouldn't take her much longer to figure it out. Plus she can clearly see there is no food in the barn and there is a doggie door right there, and she clearly saw the ponies grazing on "fresh" grass outside. I'm kind of wondering who has the lower I.Q. The ponies in the barn, or Gleaming. š
All kidding aside, I'm very much looking forward to reading more.
Monk
"not only was love blind but it must have some severe mental disorders too." -Recteik Shade
11656130
Hi there!
Glad to see you like my story! And do not worry I have some sort of revealment (is that even the right term?) moment for her planned in the following chapter. It will also explain some of the mannerisms and principles the ponies in my world operate on.
On the topic of Gleaming being too dense, it may not have come out right, but she only knows ponies as smart and sentient beings. She has been used to this all throughout her life, and it is kinda hard for people and ponies alike to let go of old habits and thing we are used to. It makes us feel comfortable. It makes us feel safe.
Just imagine walking out your door one morning and have your neighbor (literally) bark at you!
Also there is the possibilitiy that they are simply under a wide range spell making them dumber than they should be. In a world where magic is a thing, one has to always be cautious of mind magic and mental manipulations, e.g. Sombra. (hint: there is a changeling among us!)
Rest assured though, Gleaming will realize her mistake in judgement quite soon and leave her security shell. A big part of it will be through the character I introduced at the chapters end.
Hope you stay with me and my story, cheers.
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I wouldn't leave if you offered me money.
Your stories too good. Is it based on any cross overs? Should I recignise the universe or is it of your creation?
Monk
"It turns out that prostitution was viewed as an honest profession. However, how ponies figured out this was their special talent when most ponies got their cutie marks in grade school was suspiciously glossed over whenever the subject came up." -Typist Gray
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Glad to hear you wont leave ;D
To answer your question, the universe is largely my own creation, even though I borrowed some elements here and there from very different franchises, such as where technology is concerned. Which ones, I will explain instory whenever they do pop up, sometimes through Gleamings perspective, sometimes through a convenient plot device.
As for the sourcematerial of my idea, I suggest you give MadMaxtheBlack a visit. Its a human in Equestria fiction (with humans as pets to ponies), which I really liked and got me thinking if anyone has ever tried to reverse the situation. Sure there are many stories about ponies visiting earth, but those have never had to deal with non smart ones before or being stuck amongst them.
At least to my humble knowledge. (IĀ“ve read my fair share of stories here and will continue to do so, but i canĀ“t rule out that someone else had the same plot idea.)
At some point in the past I got the image of a pony sitting in my room, smiling up at me with those big puffy eyes and its tongue poking out, stuck in my head. And over the next few weeks my mind had build an entire and by far and large plausible world around them.
I even have ideas how they are connected to Equestria proper.
And lastly i went for Gleaming because she does not seem to get much love from my perspective...and there are lots of funny situations i can get her into due to her choice in a military career, now and later on.
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Cigar falls out of mouth in utter shock. You.....You Genius...You freaking genius!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thats brilliant!
Have you read
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/156213/your-human-and-you-i-am-not-spartacus
If not, you need to stop and actually read it. Dan is a god tier writer and what he did with YHAY is interesting.
Monk
āIf you can't awe them with knowledge, baffle 'em with bullshit.ā -Guardsman_Sparky
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The one i read way back was the original, centered around a human called Max and Twilight after she had just gotten her wings. Celestia had bought him as a gift to help her settle in with her new responsibilities.
But no, I have not read the one you pointed out yet.
Looks promising though. Seems like you devil may have just found whats gonna eat my sparetime for a while :D