"TWILIGHT!WENEEDYOURHELP!THERE'SSOMEFREAKYMONSTERTEARIN'UPTHEEVERFREE!!!!" I'd suggest adding spaces between the sentence. Beyond that, the story is pretty enjoyable!
Huh, a 40k crossover that doesn't fellate the Imperium, recognizes how awful everyone in that setting is, and how truly traumatic the endless conflict would be? Wow, instant thumbs up from me! Most 40k stories are from people who don't seem to comprehend that the IoM isn't actually good and that most of the warriors from the IG to the Space Marines have kind of awful lives.
"TWILIGHT!WENEEDYOURHELP!THERE'SSOMEFREAKYMONSTERTEARIN'UPTHEEVERFREE!!!!"
I'd suggest adding spaces between the sentence. Beyond that, the story is pretty enjoyable!
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The point was she's speaking so fast, it came out as an indiscernible mess.
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True, but it does mess a touch with the formatting, which was my only "issue", if it could even be called that.
Mad dreadnaught with a quirk opposite to TF2 Pyro's. Just peachy.
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Yep.
Huh, a 40k crossover that doesn't fellate the Imperium, recognizes how awful everyone in that setting is, and how truly traumatic the endless conflict would be? Wow, instant thumbs up from me! Most 40k stories are from people who don't seem to comprehend that the IoM isn't actually good and that most of the warriors from the IG to the Space Marines have kind of awful lives.