Pinkie Pie left the rock farm one fateful day, only to stumble on a scene nopony should ever be forced to see, a captured stallion about to be killed. She was trapped in a basement under a store in Ponyville until she is forced to love it.
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Okay...I read up to chapter 3 and I see a couple of problems...
The first problem is one that I myself have, but not as bad as you do. The story is readable, but your grammar is terrible. You don't seem to understand writing very well and that is a put-off to new readers. I suggest you try to to strengthen your knowledge of grammar and writing by taking a few online courses or reading a book about the subject. Trust me, I am giving you advice that was given to me and it helps. Also, consider finding a good editor to work with in one of the FIM groups or some kind of editing program like Grammarly. (Google it!)
Second, the alternative universe thing is really working against your depiction of Pinkie Pie. I could somewhat envision the character while I was reading, but changing cannon details about the character is not always a good idea. Some people do it very well while some others don't...Also, some of the dialogue sounds very unbelievable when she speaks. Even Pinkie Pie would not go off on a completely random spew about nonsense when she is standing over a beaten stallion strapped to a table. My advice here is pay more attention to how Pinkie Pie talks in the TV show and try to replicate that. In addition to that, what was with the whole thing about Pinkie Pie saying quote: “I-I know I’m a pony, but I guess I’m also a little hoarse”
I could not wrap my head around that one at all, a accurate portrayal of Pinkie Pie would not include such a strange response...
Finally, some of your paragraphs are way too long and contain information that isn't needed. I don't need to know that Pinkie Pie looked over there then she walked over there then she opened the door then she went inside. (You see the problem here?) It drones on...(Also, this is feedback I have gotten too.) My suggestion is pull out a thesaurus and reference it when you are writing a paragraph. See if you can find words that convey your message using fewer words.
I will say that some of what you wrote is good, but most of it is not. I hope my comments help you improve.