It’s still is one, he is just recounting events. Though the author SHOULD end it with a page end, something akin to a sign off.
So the MC is former military, sticking to First Contact rules, a bit of a dick and is exploiting their kindness like he should. I like him and can’t wait to see more!
10087979 Good idea, I should probably do that for the sake of not confusing the reader. The only reason I split up entries from the same day is so that it's easier to read in the first place.
Glad you like it, by the way! Wasn't sure how the reception on this would be.
It’s rare to find these kinds of stories, most get abandoned sadly.
If you plan to stick with the whole Journal style, there are a few things I can suggest:
1) Notes in the margins, what this means is that Future Franco comes back and makes clarifications or addendums about things his past self didn’t know. This can also be used to make funny comments or point fun at characters that he knows well in the future.
2) Day by Day, Week by Week, what this means is that each entry can be as short as a day or as long as a week. This allows you to fit in things such as sleeping, Lunas Dream Walking or evening other characters point of views without breaking the pace or flow of the story.
3) THE LIST! A reference AND a good way to immerse your readers in the MCs General activities such as reading, thinking and problem solving! Essentially it is the MCs list of things he wants to do, it can be mental or written down AND give your MC a general structure to follow.
These are just the three off the top of my head. I hope they help!
10088138 Appreciate the feedback! A list wasn't something I had considered, but I'll keep it in mind. It seems like something Franco would do. The other two I'm already implementing.
Pinke, who had been very quiet before, now suddenly found her voice as she gave me a long-winded explanation. “Of course, silly! There’s ponies,- that’s us!- griffons like that meanie Gilda, cows, zebras like Zecora, donkeys, yaks, although I’ve never gotten to meet one. Oh! And Spike over there is a dragon!”
I wouldn't trust what Pinkie says avout other races persinally, she has a terrible track record. Turned Ponyville against Zecora, and antagonized Gilda to destroy her friendship with RD out of jealousy. Honestly, she seemed a bit racist ti me.
I feels weird that it starts off like a journal but then just becomes a normal story. other than that this is great!
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It’s still is one, he is just recounting events. Though the author SHOULD end it with a page end, something akin to a sign off.
So the MC is former military, sticking to First Contact rules, a bit of a dick and is exploiting their kindness like he should. I like him and can’t wait to see more!
10087979
Good idea, I should probably do that for the sake of not confusing the reader. The only reason I split up entries from the same day is so that it's easier to read in the first place.
Glad you like it, by the way! Wasn't sure how the reception on this would be.
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It’s rare to find these kinds of stories, most get abandoned sadly.
If you plan to stick with the whole Journal style, there are a few things I can suggest:
1) Notes in the margins, what this means is that Future Franco comes back and makes clarifications or addendums about things his past self didn’t know. This can also be used to make funny comments or point fun at characters that he knows well in the future.
2) Day by Day, Week by Week, what this means is that each entry can be as short as a day or as long as a week. This allows you to fit in things such as sleeping, Lunas Dream Walking or evening other characters point of views without breaking the pace or flow of the story.
3) THE LIST! A reference AND a good way to immerse your readers in the MCs General activities such as reading, thinking and problem solving! Essentially it is the MCs list of things he wants to do, it can be mental or written down AND give your MC a general structure to follow.
These are just the three off the top of my head. I hope they help!
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Appreciate the feedback!
A list wasn't something I had considered, but I'll keep it in mind. It seems like something Franco would do. The other two I'm already implementing.
I wouldn't trust what Pinkie says avout other races persinally, she has a terrible track record. Turned Ponyville against Zecora, and antagonized Gilda to destroy her friendship with RD out of jealousy. Honestly, she seemed a bit racist ti me.