Awakening: Prologue
How did it come to this?
How did it come to be here?
Twilight Sparkle stood by the Canterlot cliffs by the waterfall. The cliffs lead straight down to a seemingly bottomless black pit that was almost a mile wide. This was the place. This was the place she will be meeting her end. Here is where she will die.
In front of her, not fifteen feet away was everypony. Her friends, Applejack, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Rarity and Rainbow Dash. Her brother, Shinning Armor, was standing by them. And her two mentors, but friends and now family stood by him. Princess Celestia and Princess Luna.
“Twilight please!” begged Rainbow Dash, her own face mixed with tears and pain. “Don’t do this!”
“Come one Sugarcube!” yelled Applejack with her own voice of sorrow. “Ya know we can help you!”
Her friends, the one she had met since her first step to Ponyville and became the Elements of Harmony by her side for many years straight, telling her not to jump.
“Twiley, don’t do it!” begged her brother, Shinning Armor. His face was beyond sorrow and his cheeks were streaming with his tears.
Her brother, the one that had loved and raised her since birth, taught her magic, guided her through life and became prince of Canterlot, telling her not to jump.
“Twilight Sparkle, I beg of you!” Her mentor yelled. The one who raised the second part of her life, gave her purpose, trained her and loved her like a second mother, was telling her not to jump.
Twilight, with her own tears, looked upon her whole family. The ponies that loved her and cared for her. The ones that she loved so much, that she was willingly to do anything for them, and that included dying for them.
“You know why I have to do this!” she spoke with tears but with a firm voice. Her eyes met them all. “You know why I have to die!”
They knew why she wanted to do this. They knew why she wanted to die.
Not twenty-four hours ago, they had a visitor, a visitor from the future. That visitor was Sweetie Belle. But this Sweetie Belle wasn’t the kind, fun loving pony they knew of today. No, this older Sweetie Belle looked like she had gone through the worst war of Equestria.
Her once beautiful body was covered with scars and opened wounds. Her coat and mane were streaked with blood in almost all parts of her body. And her face, which once held beauty and grace, was replaced with an angered and soul torn look.
She came into play when all of her friends were visiting the Canterlot. They were all there. They all came to enjoy a private dinner party when she came.
Since it was private, the mane six, her brother and the princesses only knew of what had happened. They all watched as the magical aura that emitted from the center of the room began forming the pony.
Sweetie Belle, though worn and in pain, still managed to look around with her angered eyes yell at her.
“What have you done, Twilight?! What have you done?! You killed us all! You killed us all! You should be dead!”
Sweetie Belle then collapse dead. A magical scroll and recording technology then appeared by her. Nobody had moved for minutes from either pure shock or fear. Rarity immediately ran to her fallen older sister.
Celestia ordered to secure the room so that only they remained in here and nopony else see what has happened.
Reading the scroll out loud, the horrid truth came out.
‘In the ten years that is to come, Twilight Sparkle gains power. She takes in all of the magic and power of the Elements of Harmony and uses it. With it, she is consumed by it and tries to take over Equestria.
With that power, she easily destroys the Princesses, taking their power and ruling over all the lands. Millions perish under her rule and many more to come.
A war begins and between the side of Twilight stand dark forces of unimaginable power against the free ponies. Through her power, she easily is winning the fight and lives are slipping away.
The attempts to assassinate her multiple times have failed; a plan has been created to send a single pony back in time to ensure Twilight’s death to prevent this future has been ordered.
At this point, if Twilight does not die, then this future will be lost. This fate, is unavoidable for the next time she had used the Elements, it consumed her and ended the lives of the other bearers.
I beg you, ponies of the past to join forces and stop Twilight Sparkle before it is too late. The future depends on her death!
Signed,
Trix---
The signing ended there for there had been a streak of blood splatter on the scroll.
Nopony had spoken at all and some of their gazes focused on Twilight. Her face was filled with dread and horror. That just came from the scroll, she dared not imagine what was on the recording device.
That single moment is now what put her in this position now. She was slowly moving back towards the edge, her left back hoof was stepping at the edge.
“Twilight!”
Princess Celestia tried to use her magic but Twilight knew they would attempt to stop her. She quickly conjured up a force-field against any magic.
When Celestia’s magic failed she gave a sad smile.
“I’m doing this for you!” she spoke. They all stopped. “You know what the scroll and video said. It’s unavoidable and I will not be consumed and kill everypony. I won’t do that… not knowing it could happen again.”
“Twilight, please be reasonable!” Spoke Luna. “You do not have to use the Elements!”
Twilight already knew of that.
“I know, but if Discord were to get free or if the other evil creatures and Alicorns were set free, how would we stop them without the Elements?”
The princess tried to speak but nothing came up. Throughout their existence, they have used the Elements of Harmony to stop any evil and keep peace and Harmony throughout Equestria. Discord was one of the few that could stop them without the Elements.
They were not all powerful after all.
When no answer came, Twilight smiled one last time and spoke softly, “I love you all.”
Three steps back and she fell.
“Twilight!” they all yelled. Rainbow Dash was the fastest to react and ran to the cliff before jumping of and diving down. Twilight free fell down the cliff to the dark abyss.
As she did, she saw the colorful pegasus fly down after her. She knew she would come rescue her. As soon as she was within range, Twilight casted a teleport spell that send Rainbow Dash appearing nearly cloud level.
Dash looked around and saw that she was right over the cliff but super high up. She could still see Twilight falling. Without thinking and without any speed, she blasted off in a Sonic Rainbow, already reaching the Canterlot Castle height.
Twilight saw as her friend create the Rainbow with ease and seeing it one last time, she would die happy gazing at the wonderful display. She was getting closer to the bottom for the darkness was approaching more and the colder it was getting.
Rainbow Dash already reached the point of the cliff and picking up speed. Twilight saw Rainbow’s light, lighting up the abyss. Turning her head, she was less than a hundred feet from the floor.
She turned to Rainbow and saw her face. What was not on her face was fear, but sadness and sorrow. Twilight knew that even if Rainbow was to reach on time, she had no way of pulling off at that dive and speed. They would both die before she had a chance.
Rainbow’s tears were beyond falling and Twilight felt her getting close. Rainbow extended her hoof. Twilight saw her approaching fast. They were getting close now.
A final smile and a tear from Twilight, Rainbow’s eyes went wide.
"NO!!"
With the last of her magic, she sent Rainbow back up to the air in the opposite direction, almost like bouncing her away from her.
Rainbow didn’t know it till she shot past the cliff and did a sharp turn.
Her friends and family saw the purple flash of Rainbow Dash and nothing more.
Twilight knew that she was at least ten feet away before thoughts raced into her mind. Why couldn’t she just find other answers to this? Why couldn’t she just speak to everypony about it?
She didn’t care though. For at that moment, she knew one thing and one thing only.
“They were going to live.”
Only Blackness came.
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This was written in a matter of two hours so sorry if there are mistakes.
Not a bad beginning. Some grammar mistakes in places, but nothing too bad. I'm very interested in where this goes from here.
Meh. Faved for updates. lets see how this story goes.
Imma watch this. And you, if this turns out to be good.
Seems like a promising start, lets see how the next chapter turns out
An original and interesting premise, tracking, let's see where you take this.
Not bad... VERY promising
Why not? It looks very good. And promising. Godspeed and goodluck.
more than 32 hours, so there should be at least 12 chapters. Where are they?
*sigh* Ok, let me start off by saying that I have not read anything beyond the description yet. I like the concept and would love to see where you take it once it is finished. That being said, here is my one problem:
"M rated will be featured in a seperate series"
I apologize to the author for what is about to follow as it is a culmination of the number of times I've seen this happen. This is nothing against you personally. I just really need to get this off my chest.
This may be just me, but I can't stand when authors break up their stories into separate posts in order to isolate any grim-dark / clop / Barbra Streisand / whatever. As a reader, I like to have the entire story right there, all in one place. I'm not too fond of jumping back and forth between story posts just to read one fic. But that's just my own bit of picky/whiny crap.
I really don't understand how any author could so readily rip apart his/her work like that. If you are going to write something, you should take pride in it. If you want to write it, then write it. We, the readers, are (should be) responsible enough to know what we want and don't want to read; and can readily skip ahead if/when necessary. If it's a subject you feel so uncomfortable writing that you need to isolate it, then maybe you shouldn't be writing it at all. If you don't like writing mature scenes, then simply don't write them. If you're just fine writing mature scenes, then have some pride in your work (and a bit of trust in your audience) and put it where it belongs in your story.
That's enough from me, I think. As I said, this isn't meant to be an attack on you. I'm just really frustrated with the number of authors I've seen do this.
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I can understand what you mean. I hate it too but the reason I do it is because of the raitings. If i start a series off with an M' rating, then people are less likely to read. So only 18 over read it. But if I do teen, 13 or so read it. I get more people to read it. I honestly am not afraid to write sexual stories, hell Ive done it before in diffrent websites. Hell they were the best ones out everything else ive written. But here votes and views counts, other sites where just pure adults so it was easier.
Here, teens and below, have tthe tendacies to false their crap and all and end up reading something and get the wrong idea. That is why I do teen. The seperate series... might not make is so try not to worry about it. It wont even be direclty just the cloppong parts is all.
I take pride in writing for adults cause if they read it and get off on it.... then ive done my job right. I am glad that out of the comments, I responded to yours and I thank you for your words.
1131507 And I thank you for taking the time to respond.
"If i start a series off with an M' rating, then people are less likely to read. So only 18 over read it. But if I do teen, 13 or so read it."
Actually, that's not entirely true. You are probably right about getting more readers, but your reasoning is actually backwards. Quite a few of the adult readers here are far too squeamish when it comes to adult material or even shipping (gasp!); and they won't touch anything that could be classified above "PG". The 13-18 age group? Unless viewing mature content involves a credit card, they are going to see and read whatever catches their fancy. Hell, I did that myself at 13! (Good lord was that really two decades ago? Damn, I feel old!)
That aside, I do understand why you would prefer to keep it "Teen" here. It is hard to get your name out there when so many people look at ratings and go "Ew! Something that defies my moral and/or ethical standing!" and refuse to read (or worse, down-vote without reading) what might be an amazing story. I'm not about to try and tell you how you should create your own works. All I ask is if there ever comes a time where you do decide to post a "clean version" of something, could you provide a link to where it remains uncut? I'd ask the same of any author if I was actually active online instead of quietly lurking in the shadows... huh. I need to "e-get out" more.
Sir, let this continue. For I can feel that this will be truly epic if you pull this off.
author needs to read these:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Grammatical_tense
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Grammatical_tense#English
probably several times.
i was interested until some of the grammar issues kept pulling me.out of the story :/