that was cold twilight

I bet she'll get a high rank and RD will challenge her to a match, but is n match fr Twilight's magic.

This is shaping up to be good.

Anime

Nice

"That was... peculiar, but that cloak was nice." Stated the unicorn mare to herself before shrugging and resuming with her shopping. "Ugh... green? Only a ruffian would wear something like that!" Unbeknownst to her, a green-furred pony was giving her the stink eye behind her because of that crude remark.

you don't need to use the term "because of that crude remark" or any variant really it's kind of implied by the pony giving her the stink eye.

Besides that I like the story so far I feel a mix of different elements of inspiration in this story; the ranking system reminds me of the hero ranking for example. I feel like I've seen the three scars and a blind eye somewhere before but I can't remember where.

this first chapter is interesting, but that twilight let someone die just in front of her for no reason when she can have easly save his life... even if she have a 'cold' personality, I don't think someone like her will let this happen (even more when she kill the mob just after).

Also, great Goblin slayer vibe here, hope the next parts will be good.

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Yeah, then she immediately outs the smugglers, which doesn't even fit the her personality at that point, she really shouldn't care.

In strong need of an editor.