You(Anon) Are a human stuck in the world of Anthros, You worked at the Stone farm but some “particular” pony has a very hard time expressing something for you
I enjoyed the story. I was thrown off a couple times with sentence errors, but it was good anyways. I wouldn't mind seeing a continuation with this or sequels. Keep it up.
The random capitalisation is really bothering me. Words should only have a capital letter if they are names or at the beginning of sentences, with a few exceptions. I often find myself doing the same thing when writing.
One MAJOR flaw. Bossom means breasts. For the vigina the terms you’ll want to use are cunt, pussy, or vag.. If nothing else please fix that, it honestly frustrates me more than it should.
9629960 I'll attempt... As soon as i get the new tablet/laptop, if you want to do it with your own hands, you can edit the mistakes in this chapter cause u have ma permission. Then post the edited chapter in pastebin
This makes it read as though she's mining for bits and coins from the earth.
The act of mining had become an ingrained habit having done it all of her life, but financially rewarding when they harvested precious gems, gem clusters, or precious minerals and metals.
10050926 Thanks for the correction, excuse me for not replying earlier because I was preoccupied with tasks that I need to check before retrying my fanfictions again. Not this one though.
The grammar definitely needs editing.
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i am my own editor, since i don't have any
I enjoyed the story. I was thrown off a couple times with sentence errors, but it was good anyways. I wouldn't mind seeing a continuation with this or sequels. Keep it up.
9445941
Well i'll continue it, But expect better grammar next time because i'm polishing the next chap!
9445975
No rush, it was great. :) I can really see this going somewhere.
The random capitalisation is really bothering me. Words should only have a capital letter if they are names or at the beginning of sentences, with a few exceptions. I often find myself doing the same thing when writing.
9519790
Yeah, excuse me about that, like i said, i am my own editor. and i'm doing a really bad job to it, don't worry 'll get it soon
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I can help you edit this chapter, if you want.
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Permission granted, just message me and paste it on pastebin, And also Thanks!
One MAJOR flaw. Bossom means breasts. For the vigina the terms you’ll want to use are cunt, pussy, or vag.. If nothing else please fix that, it honestly frustrates me more than it should.
9629960
I'll attempt... As soon as i get the new tablet/laptop, if you want to do it with your own hands, you can edit the mistakes in this chapter cause u have ma permission. Then post the edited chapter in pastebin
(Have summer job + depressed sis)
RIP spelling and grammar
9629960
hehehe you misspelled it
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This makes it read as though she's mining for bits and coins from the earth.
10050926
Thanks for the correction, excuse me for not replying earlier because I was preoccupied with tasks that I need to check before retrying my fanfictions again. Not this one though.