Return of the Manticores

by MarcDaJohnson

Author's Notes

Welcome everyone and thanks for viewing. First off, this is my first non-mature story and any feedback you can give would be greatly appreciated, especially combat mechanics as so far they have proved challenging to say the least. That being said, there will be plenty of fighting taking place, but no blood or gore. I decided to take this route to keep the Everyone rating, but I would rate it closer to E-10+. If at any point you feel I crossed the line for Everyone, please let me know and I'll deal with it. Also, CH1 & 2 have been merged to avoid bumping the story with this addition and to improve continuity. Well that's all I've got, hope you enjoy the show.

Comments

[darthvader45]

So this is almost like Skyrim, except with ponies and manticores? Because the description vaguely sounds like what happened in Skyrim (Nords ignored that the dragons were back, one man stops them).

[MarcDaJohnson]

997523 I can see where you would make that connection, but it was never intended to be associated with Skyrim. However, this story was inspired by it but will have next to nothing to do with the Elder Scrolls. Twilight's not manticore born, she won't be absorbing their souls or something silly like that. That may be why this is flopping so hard, everyone assumes by the description that I took Skyrim and said 'you're a pony and you're a pony".

[darthvader45]

Yeah, but still, good idea. I give it a thumb up and a track.

[QuackmanBrony]

Nit picking powers activate! XD Just kidding.
"No problem Two, let me just put my bags in here." * I bet ya meant Twi
The punctuation's not that bad. There are places they could be but I don't think they're necessary. I could be wrong though. I'm probably wrong.

[MarcDaJohnson]

999585 Yep that my Kindle's magic sabotage powers rearing it's ugly head. Note to self: add every pony related word to Kindle's dictionary right now.