Excellent first chapter, Nightsong, m'dear! Looking forward to more!
But... I think you need to stop using these; / /; when you want to italisize something, hun. (I know you explained why you use them a bit ago, but if you can, you might want to go back and correct any of those you've used for that with these: .) Minus the spaces, of course.
Anyway, as I said, looking forward to more of this one! Keep up the rad work, okay?
Excellent first chapter, Nightsong, m'dear!
Looking forward to more!
But... I think you need to stop using these; / /; when you want to italisize something, hun.
(I know you explained why you use them a bit ago, but if you can, you might want to go back and correct any of those you've used for that with these: .)
Minus the spaces, of course.
Anyway, as I said, looking forward to more of this one!
Keep up the rad work, okay?
Jesus Christ. What a way to start a story.